Reviews of Deleted Novel

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I like the story honestly, 10/10. But the addition of complicated background for the MC in the later chapter is a big let down for me. I like how he comes from a normal family more. Also, the story about the jungle king is really unnecessary. I don't say the jungle king bloodline unnecessary, but the unnecessary part is the story about the bloodline, The story about the jungle king. Okay, it needed to explain the bloodline, but could you make it less exaggerated? Then comes the parents complicated backgrounds. I think the one from mother side is enough if you make the jungle king part simple enough and less exaggerated. But again, you add about father complicated side with "strange" Sona's sport's channel's commentator-like reaction, with long story explanation. I don't know, but it feels strange. Well, it's just my opinion and there are chapters ahead that I haven't read yet. So I hope it doesn't degenerate and actually much better because I like the previous chapters of this story....

I was going to discard this story, because everyone read chapter 2 the same, where if you do not read more, you would think that the whole plot would be of a protagonist who is foolish and a slave to the system, I thought that I would also leave him because he risked his life being weak , But seeing more chapters, I change a little, just one thing, change the canon a little, put characters that OC, to make it more interesting, such as for example you create a "hidden clan" that is never known, but that are hidden, where the protagonist can help a citizen of that faction who was in trouble, where they would be grateful to let them visit, where they can learn magic from anyone you want to put to further improve their attack range. -------------------------------------------------- -------------------------------------------------- -------- -And when you go to Kyoto or before, you can establish a friendship with the leader Yasaka, helping her with the chaos brigade, she can also have more advances in "Toki" among other energies, there are so many ideas that you could put and not just follow Cannon. - Another would be, you may meet "laviana reni", if you are looking for info you will know that she is a magician, I do not remember her name, but she may have an arc of magicians from different factions, something that is not seen much, and because I liked it too the character of "laviana reni".

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The story is good, 100 times better than I expected. Not only that, the chapters are pretty long as well. It’s really unlike most other fan-fics on this site. 5/5 mastapiece

I read until chapter 16. I'll give this 6 stars. This is whats missing in Webnovel. A story that is not just about MC thinking by his lower body and collecting girls just like an item. Who is not OVER dominating that it just becoming arrogance. This story is about an MC that actually thinks and has plans. Merciful but ruthless to his enemies. The MC is not beta neither Over alpha. Just the right amount of alphaness. I still have a lot to say, but I'm tired and my phone is slow. In conclusion, this fanfic is one of the best HSDxd fanfics in the web.

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Love it. I remember suggesting making this on a poll on your other novel I honestly didn't think it would blow up like this but I'm glad it did.

Great story with good power progression, development and relationship building. Story is well written out and the MC is also very well developed with a mature thinking pattern allowing for more realistic relationships in the story. Eagerly awaiting more chapter. Recommended

NICE ROMANCE no need to get fast at it just slow and steady for readers to enjoy it hahaha great works Xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp xp

Nice fanfiction great background nice story thank you giving us a great fanfiction i will support this story to the last chapter😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊😊

A great fan fic over all passing is great the lore and the main character personality are just verry well made just makes you want to read more keep up the good work ^_^

Hey Swat! Just wanted to let you know that I loved this story, is there any chance you could bring it back, or reupload the chapters that existed previously? I really want to read it again😎

My favorite parts are when he gets like in Sherlock mode, and that arc of him being a detective was really nice, hoping for you to come back 🥺

the reason the novel's ranking is more than 4 is because a lot of scoundrels gave it several times............................................. ... ............

Great story keep up the excellent work and I can't wait for the next chapter usually really like the system you are using and have enjoyed reading this story