Review Detail of jeanpierregerardo in Deleted Novel

I was going to discard this story, because everyone read chapter 2 the same, where if you do not read more, you would think that the whole plot would be of a protagonist who is foolish and a slave to the system, I thought that I would also leave him because he risked his life being weak , But seeing more chapters, I change a little, just one thing, change the canon a little, put characters that OC, to make it more interesting, such as for example you create a "hidden clan" that is never known, but that are hidden, where the protagonist can help a citizen of that faction who was in trouble, where they would be grateful to let them visit, where they can learn magic from anyone you want to put to further improve their attack range. -------------------------------------------------- -------------------------------------------------- -------- -And when you go to Kyoto or before, you can establish a friendship with the leader Yasaka, helping her with the chaos brigade, she can also have more advances in "Toki" among other energies, there are so many ideas that you could put and not just follow Cannon. - Another would be, you may meet "laviana reni", if you are looking for info you will know that she is a magician, I do not remember her name, but she may have an arc of magicians from different factions, something that is not seen much, and because I liked it too the character of "laviana reni".