KENTARO12100
Story is great, I especially appreciate the MC as she is both charming and cunning at the same time. World is pretty immersive too. I like how you indoctrinate the concept of historical events which makes it even more realistic despite the supernatural concepts that accompanies within. Grammar-wise, yeah could use a lot of improvement, a mishap of punctuation every now and then. Overall, I can say that it is a refreshing read and got me hook up quite a bit. Keep up the good work and keep improving!!!
The story seems to be about a powerful nightmare loli about to go to kindergarten. There are many, many concepts in this novel, names of gods, important events, family circumstances, abilities, and powers at play. The complexity provides potential, but I had to backtrack, to be certain I was reading correctly. The action is very good, but is sometimes difficult to understand because of your English grammar. The lead heroine is 4 years old and terrifies me with the way she speaks, which I think may be intentional. I wouldn't want to meet this loli with anything short of a heavy machine gun for her face and a pistol for myself, in the inevitable case that the machine gun doesn't work. GREAT WORK, AUTHOR!
While the author greatly succeeds in creating a protagonist that is both charming and sympathetic, I have some problems in genuinely sympathising with other characters as they seem unlifelike. I would like to see some more personality on their account. Furthermore, I must confess that the grammar and vocabulary weren’t that good, but I sincerely believe that such a thing can only develop over time given practice. I am certainly no stranger to this myself, and do not wish to dissuade you by telling you that this point is rather lacking. Overall, I believe that this story has some real potential and that it deserves praise. I wish you all the best and a lot of fun continuing your story.
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First of all, interesting story and character. Loved how the character acted so casually. The way you started the novel is very unique however I can't really follow the flow of the story, but it is only the first few chapters, the rest is good. Keep up and good work and I know how you are feeling when you said that not many readers commented, [pat shoulder] just know that their are many people supporting you in silence and continue to update. 👍👍👍You have my support.
The author has a good imagination, but the inconsistency in grammar had dulled it a little. But nevertheless it's still a good novel to read I think, and when that little girl asked I belong to that country ( origin ) but adopted into an another country, it was a new concept, so good keep going. Hope to see many more chapters in the future.