Reviews of RWBY - Fall of Grimm

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Did I forget to self review? Yes, yes I did... Though I call my work nothing short of a masterpiece in the making. I’m not making any money from this and I might have to get an actual job soon and only get the chance to really get into making chapters on the weekends. So yeah. Also, you guys ever have something to tell me. Just hit me up here! Or on the Facebook I made at... Daban Crow! Yeah just DM or something. I don’t really post things.

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Pretty good in my opinion. It actually doesn't focus on the start of RWBY but more on his childhood and such with Ruby and Yang. Which is new to me as most authors that do an RWBY fanfic kinda skip childhood using their author powers and focus on the start of the story and let me tell ya, the author did a pretty good job on creating new scenarios and such without relying on the canon storyline, it's very interesting. Some of the problems that I have with writing is that the author combined multiple worlds together without stating why, how, it just happened. Like one chapter Revy from black lagoon showed up in child form and some gangsters are Doflamingo, Aizen, Obito, and Blackbeard. It wasn't explained how or why they all just showed up, I actually left it to rot because of how dumb that is to combine anime worlds. Like the power, levels would all be messed up and stuff as some people are actually restricted (Aizen with the fact that he cannot use his full power in the human world, they made the devil fruits disappear from the user and now they have to find them again.)

Man i love the way that the character fells alive and not some sort of puppets at your mercy . The story have good pace ,but you must retain the unicness of the characters, the implementacion of diferenta elements must dont distort the universe that you are molding into a mess of aberrations .The details and emotions of the character make this fac fic truly great.

I don't usually take the time to review the novels I've read, but I feel this one deserves one It's honestly great, I don't read that many RWBY fanfictions, but this one is wonderfully done, and combined with the Naruto aspect, it's 100x better Nice job, and good luck writing!

Why not give him shadow manipulation, he is a Shinobi so it makes sense to give him something that compliment his characteristics.ssssssssss

I think this is a good story, with some good and decent writing, that also have a very fresh and slow start, instead of the classic "3 chapters in super timeskip" where the author just skips to the main plot, and dont think much about the character development. Great job so far fam. ""Me nOt gOod At englsih, mE SorRy iF aNy misTaKes.

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I am giving you 4.6 becuase of the unstable update but the story is pretty damm good dude or dudet either of the two if you are a male or female Keep it up

I for one love your story it's unique. Personally i dont care if the mc op as long as he eventually has a challenge otherwise the stories boring.

This is a really enjoyable story with a mature no nonsense mc with a good pace to the story so far updates can be slow (we readers always want more ) and the author seems happy to interact with readers so more pls!

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Good story(for now). Will see how it goes later as it is only begging. Stable updates. But like with all good stories you want to get more then you get now.

I like the idea of this novel but this has a lot of things that madara uchiha wouldnt do like telling someone his abilities especially with knowing everything in rwby he just wouldnt give information out like that I also dont like the fact that he barely uses his eye and he loses it like cmon the eye powers are op and even with just the powers he had unlocked he should be using that fighting experience madara has its almost like he has the power of madara but not the life experience or will not even the skill. My main point is if your gonna use Madara in a fanfic he should be ******** and selfish he did try to take over the world on top of that he basically did it alone he had no allies just pawns.

The story might need some improvement, but is a great fanfic. The writing style is quite good and this fanfics ion is really interesting in that sense. I highly recommend this. For all the RWBY fans, this is a must read!!