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Yogsa
YogsaLv41yr
2023-06-16 22:58

I was really liking the story but I gets downhill very fast after chapter 40. Around chapter 70, author added a forced "face slapping scene" of 5 chapter long. Like why? The most interesting part of the story is the origin expanse. But Author is spending less time on it.

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Iseeyou
IseeyouLv15

It’s not forced though? He was getting bullied by the entire school basically and he showed up and got his revenge. Plus he gets tons of good loot for it so it was worth it.

HideousGrain
HideousGrainAuthor

Yogsa, it looks like you didn't read the novel thoroughly. That's fine tho. You are free to leave if you don't understand the necessity of certain events, and the meaning of character growth

hero4hire
hero4hireLv11

isnt that exactly why its forced? Author set up the whole scnerio for the sole purpose of 'face slapping' which completely felt out of line from storyline. I mean its his story he can do what he want, he can even wake up tomorrow and give mc laser eyes and monster pp with a ✌️"valid" ✌️ reason but doesnt mean readers are gonna accept it.

Iseeyou:It’s not forced though? He was getting bullied by the entire school basically and he showed up and got his revenge. Plus he gets tons of good loot for it so it was worth it.
Iseeyou
IseeyouLv15

Nah, if you look at it like that then every single scenario is forced in every single novel. You seem to be upset about the so called ”face slapping” which is okay but that doesn’t make the novel bad.

hero4hire:isnt that exactly why its forced? Author set up the whole scnerio for the sole purpose of 'face slapping' which completely felt out of line from storyline. I mean its his story he can do what he want, he can even wake up tomorrow and give mc laser eyes and monster pp with a ✌️"valid" ✌️ reason but doesnt mean readers are gonna accept it.
Tsetth
TsetthLv14

Perhaps the word you meant to use isn't 'forced' here, but rather the payoff(via face slap) doesn't seem worth the build-up to you... btw I'm just passing by I haven't read the novel yet...

Yogsa
YogsaLv4

Face slapping is not bad but face slapping that is stretched for several chapter makes the story boring. Like I was hyped that 'now the barrier is gone, how will Mc expand his territory or explore the jungle or what new subject he will summon etc.' but all hype was drowned by the very long scene. I agree those classmate had it coming but I find those hatchlings and war schemes more interesting.And the reason I called it forced because the Mc was more composed and calculative when he killed 7-star hero or destroyed the 1-star territory and here, he was easily triggered when the boy unintentionally fired arrow in his direction. Bro, the elves fired many arrows at you. Why don't you go and fight them if you don't like people firing arrows at you.

Iseeyou:Nah, if you look at it like that then every single scenario is forced in every single novel. You seem to be upset about the so called ”face slapping” which is okay but that doesn’t make the novel bad.
Iseeyou
IseeyouLv15

Your right. It definitely could have been done in a better way.

Yogsa:Face slapping is not bad but face slapping that is stretched for several chapter makes the story boring. Like I was hyped that 'now the barrier is gone, how will Mc expand his territory or explore the jungle or what new subject he will summon etc.' but all hype was drowned by the very long scene. I agree those classmate had it coming but I find those hatchlings and war schemes more interesting.And the reason I called it forced because the Mc was more composed and calculative when he killed 7-star hero or destroyed the 1-star territory and here, he was easily triggered when the boy unintentionally fired arrow in his direction. Bro, the elves fired many arrows at you. Why don't you go and fight them if you don't like people firing arrows at you.
Chaossin
ChaossinLv14

Maybe expand your patience a little 🤷‍♂️

Yogsa:Face slapping is not bad but face slapping that is stretched for several chapter makes the story boring. Like I was hyped that 'now the barrier is gone, how will Mc expand his territory or explore the jungle or what new subject he will summon etc.' but all hype was drowned by the very long scene. I agree those classmate had it coming but I find those hatchlings and war schemes more interesting.And the reason I called it forced because the Mc was more composed and calculative when he killed 7-star hero or destroyed the 1-star territory and here, he was easily triggered when the boy unintentionally fired arrow in his direction. Bro, the elves fired many arrows at you. Why don't you go and fight them if you don't like people firing arrows at you.
DaoisttwG3qW
DaoisttwG3qWLv1

If you were to erase the fillers there would be less than 400chapter! So mean!!! Do you want to make the author unemployed? I'm a fan! He a the best crook ever

BL00DY
BL00DYLv4

This novel is bad and bad reviews are deleted/hidden.

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TheWorthyOne
TheWorthyOneLv14

Understandable why he deleted it

BL00DY:
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BL00DY
BL00DYLv4

You dumb?

TheWorthyOne:Understandable why he deleted it
EphemeralKaos
EphemeralKaosLv5

You shouldn't delete any review. People should have the freedom to decide what and how they review something just because you get a little upset doesn't mean it's right to remove reviews if you want good reviews and don't want bad reviews. Just write a good story, plain and simple. If you want examples of that, just look around WebNovel.

HideousGrain:Yogsa, it looks like you didn't read the novel thoroughly. That's fine tho. You are free to leave if you don't understand the necessity of certain events, and the meaning of character growth
HideousGrain
HideousGrainAuthor

WN deletes most reviews automatically if the reviewer adds certain words/catchphrases. I only delete low-star reviews without like 1-star reviews without any critique. 1-star + emojis is a valid delete imo. if you think differently that's fine tho.

EphemeralKaos:You shouldn't delete any review. People should have the freedom to decide what and how they review something just because you get a little upset doesn't mean it's right to remove reviews if you want good reviews and don't want bad reviews. Just write a good story, plain and simple. If you want examples of that, just look around WebNovel.
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BL00DY
BL00DYLv4

xD WN might be automatically deleting some but mostly you can put in 1000 curses and it still wont be deleted. It still doesn't change a fact that you alone are deleting most of reviews below 3stars. What can i do 😌 a trash will be a trash and no matter what I do it won't change itself. Truly a waste(In both senses xd).

HideousGrain:WN deletes most reviews automatically if the reviewer adds certain words/catchphrases. I only delete low-star reviews without like 1-star reviews without any critique. 1-star + emojis is a valid delete imo. if you think differently that's fine tho.
EphemeralKaos
EphemeralKaosLv5

You consider it a valid delete, but I don't consider any delete valid. I don't agree with censorship at all and that's what it is it really just censorship. I really don't have that many problems with your story. I think it's a great story. I think it is mostly well written, but there's a pretty severe problem with your main character and his decision-making at least until I get better down the line, but I'm not gonna be here for that, unfortunately

HideousGrain:WN deletes most reviews automatically if the reviewer adds certain words/catchphrases. I only delete low-star reviews without like 1-star reviews without any critique. 1-star + emojis is a valid delete imo. if you think differently that's fine tho.
EphemeralKaos
EphemeralKaosLv5

* at least up until where I read it could get better down the line

EphemeralKaos:You consider it a valid delete, but I don't consider any delete valid. I don't agree with censorship at all and that's what it is it really just censorship. I really don't have that many problems with your story. I think it's a great story. I think it is mostly well written, but there's a pretty severe problem with your main character and his decision-making at least until I get better down the line, but I'm not gonna be here for that, unfortunately
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NehodeLv2

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