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Fiskasa
FiskasaLv35yr
2018-12-28 23:56

For me, I can call this fanfic decent to be read. It can fill my times when there's nothing else to read. Though I don't know if it can be considered to be good, at last it's not bad. Maybe there are slight flaw here and there, but it's not unbearable. For writing quality, I can't give any comment. Since my english is not that good. But for me, since I can understand the story, I think it's good or decent at least. For updates stability, honestly I'm gratified this work has more than 100 chapters. Hopefully, the author will not drop this work midway. For story development. I think it's not bad. But, actually I think the author can be more in depth to write about some event. Since some event that can be interesting if written more slight in depth just being waste in haste in my oppinion. For example, the part about Shen Hong death. When I finish read that part I was like, "ahhh... So he is dead now". It's feel like there's suppose to be more interresting scene that can be presented. Afterall, Shen Hong can be called the first village boss/ cannon fodder. There's no need to be a difficulty in defeating him since the premis here is OP MC. But there can be slight more interesting plot or event in it. For character design. The MC, Shen Tian was a (how much his age again?) Billion aged immortal, with high wishdom, intellegent, knowledge, etc. But the taste he has is not like that. He is just teenager with cold feeling is what I feel from his very actions, reasonings, and justifications. Something just feel not quite right. Though I myself cannot pinpoint what it is (sorry for irresponsible remark). For world background. Yeah, this part I'm also unable to give any comment. Since I also doesn't have idea if it's good. Since it was a fanfic that took TDG world background as the frame. Overall for me, compared to worst fanfic, this work is not the worst. Neither this was very bad fanfic. Some moment reading the story can pique my interest. But there are also some moment where i feel it's too haste in event development that result in failling to present interesting plot. Note: I'm not professional in giving review. But this is what I think about this story right now. Hope this can contribute to this story since I'm quite supporting it.

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ElionAVL
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Thanks for the review, yeah I'm trying to slowly fix some of the issues you pointed out, especially in character development/design. People complained there is little dialog between MC's friends/characters so I'm trying to fix that! Thanks once again!

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Don't expect this novel to be like every other fanfic, where the MC actually knows about the world he got sent to, while also being overpowered. But for me I like those types of fanfics where the MC actually knows the world he got reincarnated into, and he takes advantage of future events that are going to happen. Of course a Little OPness never hurt nobody. Many people might say that the one thing this novel has going for it is that it has no harem. Which for me I don't mind either way, as long as it's a good story. But for me this novel has a lot of problems from the very beginning. In the first chapter he's described as someone who has been reincarnated multiple times. One of those worlds being the Naruto World, which he knew about before hand. He has also lived Millions if not billions of years. During all that time he has accumulated millions of years of knowledge and experience. The author gave him this OP background, where the MC was actually at the top of the food chain in his previous worlds. But then comes the next chapters and he dumb's down the MC and nerfs his abilities. He nerfs him so hes not so OP early on, but doing that disregards how stuff works like chakra. He also dumb's him down when hes supposed to be the smartest person in all the universe. Whats the point of giving him a background like that just to nerf him. Why not just give him a not so overpowered background or do the old cliche "he lost his memories" then over time unlock them to make him stronger. You would think being in a different world of cultivation. He would want to get stronger, because he does not know what may happen. I mean he knows nothing about this world so he knows nothing about future events, and him having lived in other worlds of cultivation were the strong pray on the weak. You would think he would be in a hurry to get stronger so that nothing unexpected happens that's out of his control, but he doesn't. He has the mind set of "Will see what happens". He doesn't act how you would think some one that has accumulated so much experiences in his many years of life would act. At times the MC is smart and at times he's dumb, he's inconsistent. He has certain skills where you wonder why he isn't taking advantage of them like the Clone Jutsu of Naruto's. There's just too much stuff that doesn't add up and i would be writing forever. So I just can't keep reading it anymore. Score wise I'm giving the writing quality a 4-star. It wasn't too good to start, but it got better over time. Stability updates I'm giving it a 3-star. I went and looked at his recent updates to see how frequent hes updating. It doesn't look too stable but it's good enough Story development for me is a 2-star. MC was dumb down so it Sort of ruined it from there for me, and the pace is too slow. It feels like it's at least three times slower than the original novel. Character design 1-star. What's the point in giving him an OP background just to dumb him down and nerf him. World development 2-star. What is there to say about this. Its basically the same world as the original. From what I have read he hasn't done much to change it yet. You may like it but, i just don't so this is my review.

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