Item: Reincarnated as Bella Swan's Brother (Twilight)
Rating: 3.6

Lucius_SSLv42mth

2024-08-19 06:30

I really want to like this fic, but I've come to realize that even with so many chapters coming out. A lot of them have nothing of importance going on. If he combined maybe 2-3 chapters together, it might help and make paying for a chapter actually worth it. This story so far has been extremely casual and maybe slice of life-ish(not sure if im using that right). Something interesting might happen one chapter and then nothing for the next few after. It feels way too slow. I dont know how to feel about the mc. He's not terrible, but he has his glaring flaws, which can be annoying.

Reincarnated as Bella Swan's Brother (Twilight)

WhiteAuthor

4.2

142 Chs

Liked by 6 people

Replies6

SadarsaLv4

" it might help and make paying for a chapter actually worth it" ...But you're not paying for it. It's a fanfic, which is free.

2mth

Lucius_SSLv4

He asks for money for EXTRA chapters

Sadarsa:" it might help and make paying for a chapter actually worth it" ...But you're not paying for it. It's a fanfic, which is free.

2mth

WhiteAuthorAuthor

Sure I do ask that but at the end of the day that's voluntary, I'm not locking those chapters forever. They will all go public someday. Joining Patreon is mostly to support me so I can do this and live a life. Thanks for the honest review though.

Lucius_SS:He asks for money for EXTRA chapters

2mth

Lucius_SSLv4

I'm not necessarily complaining, I only mentioned buying extra chapters was not worth it to highlight how short the chapters are.

WhiteAuthor:Sure I do ask that but at the end of the day that's voluntary, I'm not locking those chapters forever. They will all go public someday. Joining Patreon is mostly to support me so I can do this and live a life. Thanks for the honest review though.

2mth

WhiteAuthorAuthor

I also didnt mean it in a bad way when i replied xd, hope it didnt get through badly since its thru txt.

Lucius_SS:I'm not necessarily complaining, I only mentioned buying extra chapters was not worth it to highlight how short the chapters are.

2mth

Lucius_SSLv4

WhiteAuthor:I also didnt mean it in a bad way when i replied xd, hope it didnt get through badly since its thru txt.

2mth

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