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Leonardo_Henrique_0539
Leonardo_Henrique_0539Lv1210mth
2024-06-22 03:53

Author, everything is great with you. Don't abandon your readers; I can't stand unfinished fanfics anymore. I'm almost giving up on reading because of this. Your story is incredible! Just one thing: if you're going to do a harem, please make it make sense, hahaha.

Reincarnated as Bella Swan's Brother (Twilight)

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WhiteAuthor
WhiteAuthorAuthor

So I used to have this big review for myself, but I decided to delete it and just say this: I'm a cool dude. Read the Fanific. Yeeahh that's all.

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Iseeyou
IseeyouLv15

This is rough to read. Not to bad of a story overall. For a twelve year old with adhd. The author is unfortunately someone young and doesn’t know how to put a mature mindset into his writing. Which is understandable but still it makes the novel hard to read with the MC being very immature and super childish along with all of the other characters. If your young you’ll like this story and everyone is best of friends.

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EyeOfSauron
EyeOfSauronLv5

... well, the MC constantly does and thinks about silly things, the worst thing is that if that were the only case, it would be possible to characterize only MC as childish, but everyone acts stupid along with him. The problem is not being childish, but knowing that people don't act like that, unfortunately...

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NunuXD
NunuXDLv12

The ADHD on this mc is very intense... I really love twilight fics, but I'd hard to read when the Mc can't focus on anything for more than 100 words :/

8mth
Zeroren
ZerorenLv3

So I had to give up reading this and stopped at chapter 58. I'm the type of person to ignore reviews and judge the story myself whether it is good or not but for this I should have listened to the more bad reviews because they really did tell the truth. First off let me say this the story is decent it not great but it isn't terrible. The major problem with the story is like what everyone else has said the MC is horribly written. I will use this to describe him as a twelve-year-old who suffers from bipolar with some adhd thrown in while taking Adderall like candy. I hope someday this gets rewritten honestly keep the story the same but change the way the MC acts and this will instantly become a 5/5 novel in my book.

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PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

Honestly, the story itself is not that bad BUT i just cant stand the MC, i would stay away from anyone like him irl, i feel like he has mental impairment.

8mth
AldrianEldritch
AldrianEldritchLv10

beta MC, no calculation , just a fool, if its been real world mc won't be alive after 10 chapters. ............................................................

6mth
Lucius_SS
Lucius_SSLv4

I really want to like this fic, but I've come to realize that even with so many chapters coming out. A lot of them have nothing of importance going on. If he combined maybe 2-3 chapters together, it might help and make paying for a chapter actually worth it. This story so far has been extremely casual and maybe slice of life-ish(not sure if im using that right). Something interesting might happen one chapter and then nothing for the next few after. It feels way too slow. I dont know how to feel about the mc. He's not terrible, but he has his glaring flaws, which can be annoying.

8mth
CouchPotatoDandy
CouchPotatoDandyLv5

The thing I hate the most with this type of fanfics is how stu*id the MC's at choosing their wishes. Like why ask for mental shield when you can ask for the same power as Bella and be immune to all types of powers? And why ask to be a strong vampire when you can ask to be superman without his weakness for example? The author putting so little thought on the very first chapter is very concerning...

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