Fully Biased Review, After Reading 9 Chapters I'm way too hooked on to this story after every chapter I wanna know more and more about the story..... Upload More Chapters Mannnnn..... Also, Writing Style 10/10, Grammar 9/10, Update Stability 10/10 Word Count 6/10 (I want more 😭)

the story may be good , but i literally hate every fanfic about one piece which is about Navy or marines because they are just the dogs of the celestial dragons , the mc is gonna be a marine , then he sees those pigs cruelty somewhere , he decides to stand against them and bamn!! he becomes a pirate or criminal

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Author doesn’t even have the fundamental knowledge to figure out when Shanks lost his arm. It’s not some obscure fact, it happened in the first episode. MC is super inconsistent. One moment he’s refusing to become marine or joining Shanks, because “he doesn’t want to take orders.” Three chapters later hes on his way to Marine HQ to join. Author either has no knowledge of one piece and doesn’t care. Or he’s suffering from brain rot... Only time will tell.

author doesn't know anything about one piece, names are misspelled or even wrong, events and well known facts are wrong, it's just a power fantasy and not a well written one, I read up until chapter 40 something and the mc hasn't become likeable in the least, there are minimal interactions between characters and the ones that actually happen are boring and lacking in substance. The mc hasn't been fleshed out and we don't really get his motivations or thoughts beyond "oh I'm so strong and smart and handsome and everyone else is weak" there doesn't seem to be any overarching motivations to his actions, and if after 40 chapters we still don't know allot about the mc, his likes and dislikes, nothing. In addition all the other characters are surface level at best

To be honest, The story is bad to say the least, The power system is Trash, the author dosen't know the least bit about how gojo's powers work or how Haki works. I will say that he tried to find a way for it to be balanced with the one piece power system however it wasn't done in a good way at all. The story is mid, Read like 50 chapters and it is repetitive, it's not the worst if it was your first fanfic but if it is then i would say that you should chose an easier character to make as the power base for the MC and less complex world for you to make a fanfic on. Also the dialogue is wack and there is no real personality in the OC. The writing style isn't terrible but it's not the best either. to conclude: It's not the worst thing ever but it's bad and could use a rewrite or a redo. Good concept bad execution. This is all constructive criticism so sorry if it seems harsh, don't take it to heart. keep getting better and you can make something good one day.

Author, are you stupid? Why the hell do you make a child protagonist (physically)? I don't understand, what is the need? 60 chapters and he is still a 10 year old boy, who is in charge of a barracks in the new world, you are incredibly stupid.

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Am i reading a novel made from CHATGPT? The author watched One Piece in tiktok and decided to make a fanfic.

Si. Esta divertido. Y si. No esta en ingles porque me siento perezoso.