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Dextrode
DextrodeLv43mth
2024-12-11 22:56

Author doesn’t even have the fundamental knowledge to figure out when Shanks lost his arm. It’s not some obscure fact, it happened in the first episode. MC is super inconsistent. One moment he’s refusing to become marine or joining Shanks, because “he doesn’t want to take orders.” Three chapters later hes on his way to Marine HQ to join. Author either has no knowledge of one piece and doesn’t care. Or he’s suffering from brain rot... Only time will tell.

Onepiece: I'm Gojo Satoru

ZetharQuinn
3.9
146 Chs

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ZetharQuinn
ZetharQuinnAuthor

Trying Best To Improve It (⁠T⁠T⁠)

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Dextrode
DextrodeLv4

Bro the writing itself is more than fine. Sentence structure, grammar and vocabulary are all solid. The main issue is mainly the severe lack of One Piece knowledge. How can someone expect you know anything at all, when your already getting tripped up on the bare minimum? Crazy idea: If you want to improve, I’d suggest actually watching the show… Hell even just a couple recap videos.

ZetharQuinn:Trying Best To Improve It (⁠T⁠T⁠)
3mth
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Xilt
XiltLv3

either he skipper or watching one piece from ONE PIECE IN 140 MINUTES yt

Dextrode:Bro the writing itself is more than fine. Sentence structure, grammar and vocabulary are all solid. The main issue is mainly the severe lack of One Piece knowledge. How can someone expect you know anything at all, when your already getting tripped up on the bare minimum? Crazy idea: If you want to improve, I’d suggest actually watching the show… Hell even just a couple recap videos.
3mth
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ZetharQuinn
ZetharQuinnAuthor

I'm actually rewatching it I'm rn on brook joining crew

Dextrode:Bro the writing itself is more than fine. Sentence structure, grammar and vocabulary are all solid. The main issue is mainly the severe lack of One Piece knowledge. How can someone expect you know anything at all, when your already getting tripped up on the bare minimum? Crazy idea: If you want to improve, I’d suggest actually watching the show… Hell even just a couple recap videos.
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Bouncy_Beast
Bouncy_BeastLv4

to tell the truth shanks losing his arm it self is a real puzzle for me. I think Oda himself didn't think that humans would become this OP when he started the story.

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Unpaid_FoxGod
Unpaid_FoxGodLv14

i do agree with that, but later eps, he did mention, "i bet it.. to the new generation" or something like that. But why on luffy specifically? idk maybe cus he knows about the gomu fruit? idk. Honestly, im just a fan so many shit still unknown.

Bouncy_Beast:to tell the truth shanks losing his arm it self is a real puzzle for me. I think Oda himself didn't think that humans would become this OP when he started the story.
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Aspecto
AspectoLv13

This is a translation so it will be difficult to improvise

Dextrode:Bro the writing itself is more than fine. Sentence structure, grammar and vocabulary are all solid. The main issue is mainly the severe lack of One Piece knowledge. How can someone expect you know anything at all, when your already getting tripped up on the bare minimum? Crazy idea: If you want to improve, I’d suggest actually watching the show… Hell even just a couple recap videos.
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Crazeeee3
Crazeeee3Lv14

the latest chapter of one piece gives the real reason why shanks sacrificed his arm

Bouncy_Beast:to tell the truth shanks losing his arm it self is a real puzzle for me. I think Oda himself didn't think that humans would become this OP when he started the story.
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author doesn't know anything about one piece, names are misspelled or even wrong, events and well known facts are wrong, it's just a power fantasy and not a well written one, I read up until chapter 40 something and the mc hasn't become likeable in the least, there are minimal interactions between characters and the ones that actually happen are boring and lacking in substance. The mc hasn't been fleshed out and we don't really get his motivations or thoughts beyond "oh I'm so strong and smart and handsome and everyone else is weak" there doesn't seem to be any overarching motivations to his actions, and if after 40 chapters we still don't know allot about the mc, his likes and dislikes, nothing. In addition all the other characters are surface level at best

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To be honest, The story is bad to say the least, The power system is Trash, the author dosen't know the least bit about how gojo's powers work or how Haki works. I will say that he tried to find a way for it to be balanced with the one piece power system however it wasn't done in a good way at all. The story is mid, Read like 50 chapters and it is repetitive, it's not the worst if it was your first fanfic but if it is then i would say that you should chose an easier character to make as the power base for the MC and less complex world for you to make a fanfic on. Also the dialogue is wack and there is no real personality in the OC. The writing style isn't terrible but it's not the best either. to conclude: It's not the worst thing ever but it's bad and could use a rewrite or a redo. Good concept bad execution. This is all constructive criticism so sorry if it seems harsh, don't take it to heart. keep getting better and you can make something good one day.

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Author, are you stupid? Why the hell do you make a child protagonist (physically)? I don't understand, what is the need? 60 chapters and he is still a 10 year old boy, who is in charge of a barracks in the new world, you are incredibly stupid.

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Am i reading a novel made from CHATGPT? The author watched One Piece in tiktok and decided to make a fanfic.

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galksLv4

Si. Esta divertido. Y si. No esta en ingles porque me siento perezoso.

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SugarHoneyIceTea
SugarHoneyIceTeaLv4

as it goes it's getting worse. . and atleast edit the characters NAMES

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