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ShuYme
ShuYmeLv54mth
2024-12-14 20:40

author doesn't know anything about one piece, names are misspelled or even wrong, events and well known facts are wrong, it's just a power fantasy and not a well written one, I read up until chapter 40 something and the mc hasn't become likeable in the least, there are minimal interactions between characters and the ones that actually happen are boring and lacking in substance. The mc hasn't been fleshed out and we don't really get his motivations or thoughts beyond "oh I'm so strong and smart and handsome and everyone else is weak" there doesn't seem to be any overarching motivations to his actions, and if after 40 chapters we still don't know allot about the mc, his likes and dislikes, nothing. In addition all the other characters are surface level at best

Onepiece: I'm Gojo Satoru

ZetharQuinn
3.9
146 Chs

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Ancient_
Ancient_Lv14

Don't care about motivations

3mth
ShuYme
ShuYmeLv5

? good for you buddy

Ancient_:Don't care about motivations
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Ancient_
Ancient_Lv14

You kids need to stop trying to sound mature by talking about "character development" . Like boxers, UFC fighters etc in the real world or Baki world motivations, nothing wrong with simple motivation like power, money or fame, it's actually even better. You'll understand when you read a lot of novels and stories

ShuYme:? good for you buddy
3mth
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ShuYme
ShuYmeLv5

good for you buddy 🥰

Ancient_:You kids need to stop trying to sound mature by talking about "character development" . Like boxers, UFC fighters etc in the real world or Baki world motivations, nothing wrong with simple motivation like power, money or fame, it's actually even better. You'll understand when you read a lot of novels and stories
3mth
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ZetharQuinn
ZetharQuinnAuthor

Ancient_:You kids need to stop trying to sound mature by talking about "character development" . Like boxers, UFC fighters etc in the real world or Baki world motivations, nothing wrong with simple motivation like power, money or fame, it's actually even better. You'll understand when you read a lot of novels and stories
3mth
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Aspecto
AspectoLv13

This is a translation from a chinese author. The translator clearly just used ai to translate

3mth
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Dextrode
DextrodeLv4

Author doesn’t even have the fundamental knowledge to figure out when Shanks lost his arm. It’s not some obscure fact, it happened in the first episode. MC is super inconsistent. One moment he’s refusing to become marine or joining Shanks, because “he doesn’t want to take orders.” Three chapters later hes on his way to Marine HQ to join. Author either has no knowledge of one piece and doesn’t care. Or he’s suffering from brain rot... Only time will tell.

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bystanderwnb
bystanderwnbLv1

To be honest, The story is bad to say the least, The power system is Trash, the author dosen't know the least bit about how gojo's powers work or how Haki works. I will say that he tried to find a way for it to be balanced with the one piece power system however it wasn't done in a good way at all. The story is mid, Read like 50 chapters and it is repetitive, it's not the worst if it was your first fanfic but if it is then i would say that you should chose an easier character to make as the power base for the MC and less complex world for you to make a fanfic on. Also the dialogue is wack and there is no real personality in the OC. The writing style isn't terrible but it's not the best either. to conclude: It's not the worst thing ever but it's bad and could use a rewrite or a redo. Good concept bad execution. This is all constructive criticism so sorry if it seems harsh, don't take it to heart. keep getting better and you can make something good one day.

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Santy_Melay
Santy_MelayLv1

Author, are you stupid? Why the hell do you make a child protagonist (physically)? I don't understand, what is the need? 60 chapters and he is still a 10 year old boy, who is in charge of a barracks in the new world, you are incredibly stupid.

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meowionly
meowionlyLv14

Am i reading a novel made from CHATGPT? The author watched One Piece in tiktok and decided to make a fanfic.

3mth
galks
galksLv4

Si. Esta divertido. Y si. No esta en ingles porque me siento perezoso.

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SugarHoneyIceTea
SugarHoneyIceTeaLv4

as it goes it's getting worse. . and atleast edit the characters NAMES

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