First off, its decently written but I think author needs to change the backstory of mc as he is no way a hitman(way too nice for that)....Maybe make him some common teen thug or something. That said if u pretend the first chapter doesn't exist and take him as a blank mc then its pretty alright. Also Oc characters kinda make it weird as they feel like they don't belong in mha. Overall has potential but there should be less reliance on Ocs.
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skip the first chapter, got it. cheers. is your name lazy rabbit or crazy rabbit?
Well it depends on how much sleep I get.
lol, fair enough
Most fanfic writers for some reason always want their mc to be a former killer and be reborn as a handsome man. Even though not being handsome is fine as long as he has a harem.
yeah I feel like some authors try way too hard for what is essentially filler stuff as intro is not going to play any part in the actual story. I thinks fics will be better if they just start of with a small para saying mc got reincarnated or something and u can slowly build his character up from references to his past rather than trying to sum up entire life in a single chap.
Eternal samsara: wanderer of worlds does that perfectly. He has like 11 lives but they slowly influence and grow his character throughout the story. Reccomended read
Oh yeah I read that one.Its written by wall who has good world building skills.
I refuse to read anything from that author after what he did with his one piece fic, the author tends to make his mc kill needlessly
that one piece fic was prolly his worst one lmao.
Nah his 2nd one piece one is
Whats the second one? Doesn't he only have the Hashirama Senju one?
Thats his second one, his first one piece one was the one in skypeia
Yeah, It's very obvious he doesn't have that backstory.
1st chapter is a nightmare.
