this is for authors to improve, you are using too much Ai, it is ending ur sentences in flowery words that no one would like, for people who have no idea how ai writes it's ok but people who work with ai (most of the people on this platform) to edit / translate novels would be the first ones to point it out. although you did try to cut the access lines even so it looks as though that you are not doing enough, 2nd please don't use such seriousness sentence, and words like it would change his future, the trials to come. sentence like these please stop writing them every 2 chapters. although this too is mostly because of ai. I would suggest you write a chapter on your own and then copy past it to your preferred ai, and just tell it to edit the words and correct the grammar and typos. this would ensure that you create your own writing style and people get something worthwhile. the storyline is good tho. and get ur facts straight. the Veritaserum would put people in daze and most likely the person would effectied would only get precise answers to the question they have not have full blown conversation with the people around them. sniper seriously??? you do realise that you need to look at the eyes to aim right??? that was just dumb man, please fix that. anyhow don't take it to heart, I don't usually write reviews but iIwanted to see your story so I am giving my honest opinion that would help you out. it's batter to improve these things for the long run.
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