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tedmosby2016Lv144mth
2024-10-16 16:01

This is a good novel, being strangled to death by the narration style. The first person narration is killing it. Its like a good movie being shot through a selfie. with the shaky arm and the annoying face of the person visible, even while recording the beautiful landscape. I do not know why the author chose to use first person narration when 3rd person is exactly what this level of story needs. It is like taking a real bullit and forcing it In a BB gun. Anyway. At this point it doesn't matter how badly or lowly the author thinks of his skills in 3rd person narrative, I would rather read that than watch him ruin such a great story with s hitty, amateur 1st person narration. There is zero immersion in story. It's like watching a person trying to direct and act in a movie at the same time, yelling cut and action in the middle of a scene. Author san, I implore you to shift to 3rd person narration like any self respecting author out there. stop holding your self to the embarrassing standards of webnovel. There is a bigger world outside the bottom of a well. Your novel deserves better, so please stop letting your fear of 3rd person narration ruin a good book. Sincerely, Ted Mosby 2016

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hmak27230Author

I'll try starting chapter 7th. I suck at 3rd person.

darkwhiteLv1

nah u r doing good so far

hmak27230:I'll try starting chapter 7th. I suck at 3rd person.
VicThorLv1

U don't suck bro u are amazing 🤩

hmak27230:I'll try starting chapter 7th. I suck at 3rd person.
Generic_007Lv4

It seems weirdly... Inappropriate 😅😅

VicThor:U don't suck bro u are amazing 🤩
Krassus_2Lv4

Bro 1st person is nothing, I once read a asoif FF in 2nd person. Felt like the weirdest trip I ever had

JaredSalaz28294Lv1

Really, yapper

itsnotjackiehahahaLv1

Oh! It's this guy who keeps complaining on other books even I'm new in this website -_-

tedmosby2016Lv14

thanks to me the author fixed it. You are welcome.

itsnotjackiehahaha:Oh! It's this guy who keeps complaining on other books even I'm new in this website -_-
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steel17Lv4

the straight 27 chapters of what is essentially a entire flashback arc and its all just romance no interesting magic and its no longer enjoyable its just boring and people just stop caring its bad in general because there is no feeling of progress i admit it was fun to read the first 5 chapters but after that i wasn't even reading it anymore just glossing over it and now i just stopped reading until the arc is over and im just gonna paste all of it on chatgpt and ask it to give me a summary because there's no way im reading all that

tedmosby2016Lv14

Good to know I was right. The author was so hell bent on making the mc fanboy over this anime female character. It came out of nowhere. it was so contrived, so I am not surprised it got worse. It was like the author had a crush on this anime character.

steel17:the straight 27 chapters of what is essentially a entire flashback arc and its all just romance no interesting magic and its no longer enjoyable its just boring and people just stop caring its bad in general because there is no feeling of progress i admit it was fun to read the first 5 chapters but after that i wasn't even reading it anymore just glossing over it and now i just stopped reading until the arc is over and im just gonna paste all of it on chatgpt and ask it to give me a summary because there's no way im reading all that
Dead_rightLv3

Webnovel is full of trash novels and readers who seem to love them. They just vibe together, I guess. The funny part? Any valid criticism gets shot down because it’s “rude” or “disrespectful.” Like, come on. No wonder every garbage story on there somehow has a great rating.

tedmosby2016Lv14

Yup. People want to fit in so bad

Dead_right:Webnovel is full of trash novels and readers who seem to love them. They just vibe together, I guess. The funny part? Any valid criticism gets shot down because it’s “rude” or “disrespectful.” Like, come on. No wonder every garbage story on there somehow has a great rating.
ghustVLv5

thank you for the save

steel17:the straight 27 chapters of what is essentially a entire flashback arc and its all just romance no interesting magic and its no longer enjoyable its just boring and people just stop caring its bad in general because there is no feeling of progress i admit it was fun to read the first 5 chapters but after that i wasn't even reading it anymore just glossing over it and now i just stopped reading until the arc is over and im just gonna paste all of it on chatgpt and ask it to give me a summary because there's no way im reading all that
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