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ChaddtsLv14mth
2024-10-02 06:09

It's a child isekai story. Using the mc's age to make them very childish and immature. This is highly likely to lead to using stupidity for tension throughout the story. It's also really convoluted in the beginning, with nothing made clear or concise with a bunch of flowery language that doesn't add anything to the story at all, but rather detracts from The quality. It might turn out alright, but the Mc being so childish and unrelateable just feels like the author is trying too hard to make something unique, and it comes off as 8th grade syndrome levels of cringe instead. Even the mcs name is no good. Tldr: Trying too hard to be unique, and ends up as a cringe fest.

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EinlionAuthor

You clearly didn't read the story this is derived from xD

TheRedHoodLv4

juice world was right the world is on drugs. 1. first the beginning was not cryptic it actually makes a lot of sense if you read the original EPIC. 2. While the MC can be seen as childish he's more antisocial. 3. finally if you just don't like it you just don't like it like I understand that humans feel the need to comment on everything but you obviously did not read at least try to see me that you're just skinny which is highly likely.

TheRedHoodLv4

I meant skimming it's 5:00 don't judge me

TheRedHood:juice world was right the world is on drugs. 1. first the beginning was not cryptic it actually makes a lot of sense if you read the original EPIC. 2. While the MC can be seen as childish he's more antisocial. 3. finally if you just don't like it you just don't like it like I understand that humans feel the need to comment on everything but you obviously did not read at least try to see me that you're just skinny which is highly likely.
ChaddtsLv1

If required information is not provided it can be labeled confusing. Nothing in the synopsis says there is required reading to make sense of things. Furthermore, why not simply include the missing information where its needed? That seems to be the obvious answer.

TheRedHood:juice world was right the world is on drugs. 1. first the beginning was not cryptic it actually makes a lot of sense if you read the original EPIC. 2. While the MC can be seen as childish he's more antisocial. 3. finally if you just don't like it you just don't like it like I understand that humans feel the need to comment on everything but you obviously did not read at least try to see me that you're just skinny which is highly likely.
ChaddtsLv1

You clearly didn't include the required information. That's your job as the author.

Einlion:You clearly didn't read the story this is derived from xD
Dav0_2138Lv15

His job as an author is to put out stories. EPIC, the title of the original work this story is sequelling, is clearly in the title. If you pick up a book in the bookstore and read it, only to be confused about the story because it is the second book of a series, it’s not the author’s fault that you didn’t know that. You just saw the title and cover, thought it was a potential good read, and chose it. If it was confusing, maybe a bit of research on your part would’ve done you some good instead of immediately jumping into the reviews to complain. 😂

Chaddts:You clearly didn't include the required information. That's your job as the author.
ChaddtsLv1

No it isn't clearly isn't in the title. The word EPIC, alone means nothing, and certainly doesn't insinuate there is prior works that have knowledge the reader may need. Even Harry Potter books have a labeling to show which part of the series they are. We even have actually words for book and film series such as "trilogy". It's the failing of the author when such easy tonl disclose information isn't mentioned anywhere in its advertisement. I remember seeing posters for brisinger as a kid saying "Brisinger, The third book in inheritance cycle started by Eragon will release soon!" It's not the job of the reader to research if this is, or isn't part of a series. It's the job of the promoter, in this case, the author to ensure the audience is well informed of their works relience on another.

Dav0_2138:His job as an author is to put out stories. EPIC, the title of the original work this story is sequelling, is clearly in the title. If you pick up a book in the bookstore and read it, only to be confused about the story because it is the second book of a series, it’s not the author’s fault that you didn’t know that. You just saw the title and cover, thought it was a potential good read, and chose it. If it was confusing, maybe a bit of research on your part would’ve done you some good instead of immediately jumping into the reviews to complain. 😂
ChaddtsLv1

Ohh and reading the synopsis is all.the research needed. If the author can't be bothered to place a note there, I don't know what to tell you, aside from it being a failure of the author.

EinlionAuthor

You're a genuine idiot. Once again, there is no NTR.

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ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

You really expect someone to read 2400 chapters for one single fanfic story? At that point you might as well just read an actual book

Einlion:You clearly didn't read the story this is derived from xD
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

Wasn’t there NTR in the first book because the mc let Freya have s*x with another man even though he knew they were going to get together, or something along those lines? That’s NTR. I can’t remember the plot perfectly so I might be wrong.

Einlion:You're a genuine idiot. Once again, there is no NTR.
EinlionAuthor

Freya WANTED to get with the MC; it wasn't a guaranteed thing. Her relationship with Otaar preceded that, and once she and Vahn became a couple, she literally stopped sleeping with other men. If there was NTR, it was netori as Vahn was the one who took Freya from everyone else.

ArtoriaPendragon_:Wasn’t there NTR in the first book because the mc let Freya have s*x with another man even though he knew they were going to get together, or something along those lines? That’s NTR. I can’t remember the plot perfectly so I might be wrong.
EinlionAuthor

All I expect from people is for them to be civil and kind. I'm often disappointed.

ArtoriaPendragon_:You really expect someone to read 2400 chapters for one single fanfic story? At that point you might as well just read an actual book
machadogbcLv15

That’s the personality of the mc in the first story. Is this going to be just a remake of that with different worlds?

Einlion:You clearly didn't read the story this is derived from xD
EinlionAuthor

In a way.

machadogbc:That’s the personality of the mc in the first story. Is this going to be just a remake of that with different worlds?
machadogbcLv15

Will it also have the same pace?

Einlion:In a way.
EinlionAuthor

Much faster.

machadogbc:Will it also have the same pace?
JohnnieWalkerLv4

ffs again? dude has a hard on for shota shit.

Ivan_D_6161Lv2

well, there is 120m views of the first book, so... yes. It is half of the whole world who already did it lol

ArtoriaPendragon_:You really expect someone to read 2400 chapters for one single fanfic story? At that point you might as well just read an actual book
absolueLv13

Bruhh yuri ntr bs 🤮

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boxessssssLv4

Ok being honest it's far from the worst thing to read on webnovel. But it's a sequel to epic which means I've gone into this looking for the same feelings I got in the first chapters of epic which was full of cool powers and great fights, before dropping into a 50/50 smut/story mix after chapter 100ish from memory which is where my interest became a lot more lacklustre. Now trying not to spoil much, the outright lemons are dialed back about 80% or more but that's just them being replaced by fade to blacks and such, as a trade off vahn has already got an expansive group gunning for his bed in the first 20 chapters and it just gets worse from there. The powers are much less creatively shown as of this point in the story, there's not a whole lot of true developmental struggle for vahn in the slightest, not a single fight that I can even remember so far (if they've even been written out in favour of the fic being packed for of honestly awful romance) unlike a number I can still recall from the original to this day (e.g. the solo Rex fight). I'm tempted to mark this as spoiler purely because the plot so far is vahn walks into a room/area, flirting/foreplay ensues, gloss over anything else plausibly interesting and onto the next scene. It's rather disappointing from a writer where I've seen the heights they started from and was genuinely interested to see that quality come back but I haven't seen it yet. I'll keep reading as long as the flicker of hope I have lasts but I do not recommend this at all for people looking for a halfway creative or interesting fanfic cause I can no longer trust that you would find it.

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