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bobarella_1234
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2025-01-05 06:13

this is something where I'd only read the free chapters but nothing more, I know sometimes you get tired and don't wanna right things out fully, but still using "ur" or "u" to replace "your" or "you're" is awful, it shows a lack of interest and effort in a story. I think if you could write down your ideas and then slowly form them into one single thought. This would be good. but right now, it feels like a 6 years old just rambling on about one of their fantasy's skipping from idea to another. Also, the power scaling is horrendous. he already reached rank one at just 18 chapters in and can suddenly move at the speed of light. Make sure you edit it. Don't just post right after writing it. Actually, read your stuff out loud so you don't sound like a 6 year old.

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alright but read chapter 19

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I have rarely been this dissatisfied with a book. It’s hard to decide where to even begin because every element feels like a complete mess. The world-building? Nonexistent. The author seems to have cobbled together ideas and characters blatantly borrowed from games, movies, and other stories without any effort to create something original. There’s no cohesive world, no sense of immersion, and certainly no thought put into how anything fits together. The basic laws of physics? Completely ignored. Everything is exaggerated to an absurd degree, and not in a fun or imaginative way—just nonsensical. The power system is equally horrendous, lacking any sort of structure, logic, or creativity. It feels like the author just threw random powers at characters without a thought to balance or depth. The plot is an utter disaster, with no clear direction or purpose. Events seem to happen arbitrarily, and the pacing is all over the place. There’s no tension, no stakes, and no reason to care about what’s going on. And don’t even get me started on the character development. The characters are flat, one-dimensional, and painfully juvenile. They lack any sort of growth or complexity, making it impossible to connect with them. Speaking of juvenile, the writing style is so childish it feels like it was written by an 8-year-old. There’s no sense of maturity, nuance, or sophistication. It’s filled with cringeworthy dialogue and overly simplistic descriptions that fail to evoke any emotion or imagery. Overall, this book is an exercise in frustration. It’s immature, unoriginal, and utterly devoid of anything resembling quality storytelling. I wouldn’t recommend it to anyone, not even as a guilty pleasure. Save your time and energy for something worthwhile.

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