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UnwantedTravelerLv143mth
2024-11-30 17:23

Read 3 chapters. Really, all this is incoherent ramblings from a guy whose primary language is clearly not english. And then the Author also adds random pieces of texts in the chapter like: "Haha, the MC is so delusional he thinks he can just get stronger like that. Hahaha." Like, my brother in Christ, you wrote this shit. The MC is literally what you make him to be. If you yourself think that he is bad maybe you should idk, change it? That's all. Don't read this, writing style is dogwater, basicly zero world building, the MC just gets dropped in deus ex machina, the way to author writes down the MC's stat sheet is confusing and barely readable honestly. I really don't know what the hell people who like this are smoking.

**"Abyssal Sovereign: The Demon's Dominion"**

lyonciv0
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170 Chs

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lyonciv0Author

thank you . those people read pass chapter 3 and like I said it got better later on. thank you for your review 🙏

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UnwantedTravelerLv14

Look dude sorry, but there are like tons of novels that don't start off this badly and honestly I won't waste my time reading this for 30-40 chapters that I most likely wont like just so maybe I will like it later on. Also you do know that you can edit chapters right? You literally wrote "water mouthering" instead of mouth watering in chapter 2. That was all I had to see.

lyonciv0:thank you . those people read pass chapter 3 and like I said it got better later on. thank you for your review 🙏
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lyonciv0Author

okay thank you yeah about time to re edit it. yes you will find better novels ahead thank you

UnwantedTraveler:Look dude sorry, but there are like tons of novels that don't start off this badly and honestly I won't waste my time reading this for 30-40 chapters that I most likely wont like just so maybe I will like it later on. Also you do know that you can edit chapters right? You literally wrote "water mouthering" instead of mouth watering in chapter 2. That was all I had to see.
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lyonciv0Author

Author here, so check it out, if you are just reading it then welcome . give me your feedback and for those following it before from the previous title then let's go guys. happy to see you guys .. thanks for the love and support much appreciated

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Sean_von_kingLv13

Best book with the best ruthless Mc . Just read it if you at into evil mc am talking evil evil .

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Project_HorizonLv4

I have rarely been this dissatisfied with a book. It’s hard to decide where to even begin because every element feels like a complete mess. The world-building? Nonexistent. The author seems to have cobbled together ideas and characters blatantly borrowed from games, movies, and other stories without any effort to create something original. There’s no cohesive world, no sense of immersion, and certainly no thought put into how anything fits together. The basic laws of physics? Completely ignored. Everything is exaggerated to an absurd degree, and not in a fun or imaginative way—just nonsensical. The power system is equally horrendous, lacking any sort of structure, logic, or creativity. It feels like the author just threw random powers at characters without a thought to balance or depth. The plot is an utter disaster, with no clear direction or purpose. Events seem to happen arbitrarily, and the pacing is all over the place. There’s no tension, no stakes, and no reason to care about what’s going on. And don’t even get me started on the character development. The characters are flat, one-dimensional, and painfully juvenile. They lack any sort of growth or complexity, making it impossible to connect with them. Speaking of juvenile, the writing style is so childish it feels like it was written by an 8-year-old. There’s no sense of maturity, nuance, or sophistication. It’s filled with cringeworthy dialogue and overly simplistic descriptions that fail to evoke any emotion or imagery. Overall, this book is an exercise in frustration. It’s immature, unoriginal, and utterly devoid of anything resembling quality storytelling. I wouldn’t recommend it to anyone, not even as a guilty pleasure. Save your time and energy for something worthwhile.

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DAE_MONELv3

one word Good novel ... the author did an amazing job here . i love cruel MC

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SurrelLv1

You should give this a try, hidden gem and love the story. Although I haven't caught up to latest chapter, I'll continue when more piles up. Can't wait to see what he cooks.

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Lonely_ApexLv4

Author is definitely a gem. Good storyline, good writing that just improves the more chapters I read, awesome world and the story itself is great. This is definitely a gem among diamonds. I recommend this book to all those who loves great story.

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GTOKALv1

I hope it won't be romantic in the future because in my opinion love is an illusion and a big lie that everyone believes but it doesn't exist. In fact, there are some people who have a strong obsession with some people and think they are in love, but there is only obsession and madness. There are other people who sell their sexual obsession as love, which is nauseating.

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mbambyLv2

It’s a good first book with a lot issues. But I loved the passion. Good luck in future books

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Primordial_SteezeLv12

Author San, this novel is a dime a dozen...pls give us 2000 chapters of pure chaos..we will follow you till the end💯💯💯💯💯

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