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UnwantedTraveler
UnwantedTravelerLv142mth
2024-11-30 17:23

Read 3 chapters. Really, all this is incoherent ramblings from a guy whose primary language is clearly not english. And then the Author also adds random pieces of texts in the chapter like: "Haha, the MC is so delusional he thinks he can just get stronger like that. Hahaha." Like, my brother in Christ, you wrote this shit. The MC is literally what you make him to be. If you yourself think that he is bad maybe you should idk, change it? That's all. Don't read this, writing style is dogwater, basicly zero world building, the MC just gets dropped in deus ex machina, the way to author writes down the MC's stat sheet is confusing and barely readable honestly. I really don't know what the hell people who like this are smoking.

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lyonciv0
lyonciv0Author

thank you . those people read pass chapter 3 and like I said it got better later on. thank you for your review 🙏

UnwantedTraveler
UnwantedTravelerLv14

Look dude sorry, but there are like tons of novels that don't start off this badly and honestly I won't waste my time reading this for 30-40 chapters that I most likely wont like just so maybe I will like it later on. Also you do know that you can edit chapters right? You literally wrote "water mouthering" instead of mouth watering in chapter 2. That was all I had to see.

lyonciv0:thank you . those people read pass chapter 3 and like I said it got better later on. thank you for your review 🙏
lyonciv0
lyonciv0Author

okay thank you yeah about time to re edit it. yes you will find better novels ahead thank you

UnwantedTraveler:Look dude sorry, but there are like tons of novels that don't start off this badly and honestly I won't waste my time reading this for 30-40 chapters that I most likely wont like just so maybe I will like it later on. Also you do know that you can edit chapters right? You literally wrote "water mouthering" instead of mouth watering in chapter 2. That was all I had to see.
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