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ShreksterLv44mth
2024-10-08 21:35

Really good, you have improved in your writings,its clearly better than your other fanfic but you still have a long way, i hope to see you improve further [img=recommend]

The Twilight Gamer

WhiteAuthor
3.7
91 Chs

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OGBUE_JOHNLv4

The chapters are just too small,it's quite vexing. The story IS good but so little chapters is nauseating. It would be great if this can be worked on.

4mth
ShreksterLv4

I do agree with you on that point but apart from that i don't have any problems.

OGBUE_JOHN:The chapters are just too small,it's quite vexing. The story IS good but so little chapters is nauseating. It would be great if this can be worked on.
4mth
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WhiteAuthorAuthor

Aight if u got questions ask them here, ill asnwer any yall go that ain't super spoilers for chapters that havn't been released yet. I see a lot of reviews here that aren't correct cuz they just didnt read longer than 7 chapters , so ill answer them questions.

5mth
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FinnsRevengeLv4

5/2/1/4/4 Bro gets a system but his thoughts arent protected, proceeds to get kidnapped by the cullens and then spills the beans about his system. English quality is good though, if you can tolerate that level of bs

5mth
106
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Miki_Marlo75Lv4

The story leaves much to be desired. It starts very suddenly. They kidnap him, threaten him, force him, all without his consent. They leave him the only way out: to die and convert, they convert him and he feels nothing. Seriously, a little bit of hate or resentment but he lets it pass as if nothing and then becomes friends with someone from one moment to the next without further ado.

5mth
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Douglas_HenryLv1

bro, I tried, I swear I tried, but it's impossible to read this bulsh*t. The supposedly increased luck of the MC only serves to know whether the coin will come up heads or tails, if it is going to add a metaphysical characteristic it at least has to be used.

5mth
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Mikey_3214Lv4

He reveals he is a gamer… Disappointing

5mth
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R0BLv2

A lot of questionable choices, stupid decisions, not consistent system, "mysterious" original characters with supernatural abilities, stupid charizma implementation that makes mc not able to understand others or to be understood by others. With max intelligence mc makes the worst not logical decisions possible. Stats work like multiplayer to a selected race I guess? Even though stats increased when he changed his race? The whole system sucks.

4mth
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StellNemLv13

Another absolute masterpiece by WhiteAuthor. For those who have yet to read his other twilight fanfic, check it out after reading this one. Don't miss out.

6mth
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Austin_ScottLv2

That's not fair why does Bella get a harem but we don't?................................................................................................

5mth
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thisnovelsucksdudeLv11

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