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EldeelLv152mth
2024-12-13 02:52

While the story is good, the more I read the story, the more I feel less motivated to read it. I think the main reason I feel this way is that the MC just dosent seem to have much personality. Yeah he is edgy silent and strong but at the same time I feel like I wish there was more in him. Normally when you have an emotionally impaired mc you need more internal monologues to understand the mc psyche or a system like companion to humanist or explain mc’s opinions, though process, beliefs, etc. Right now the mc does a lot of things but I have deeper connection or appreciation for the mc. At the same time the supporting cast is utter garbage, half of the time I wished they all died in an accident or just left the mc. Specially Felix and Jack, these two make me lose respect for the mc. Being funny(cringe in this case) or strong is not enough to make a good side character. Also a lot of things related to mc’s power just stagnated. Like mc didn’t ever try to improve his water affinity, he just used it to make water once and use his one skill. World Building is lacking as well. Like there are mythical creatures and hybrids in this world. But even then a centaur was mentioned once, mermaid were used in the first part and never again. And the whole story being a novel became less and less relavent. Like if someone asked me where is the mc from, I coudnt answer. Important world questions like which country the mc is from, what is the political situation, how are normal humans treated in this world. But I have to give creadit where it’s due and say the story and the plot is very good. It is intresting most times to ignore some of these shortcomings. I think it’s a good enough book that many people will like it but I really feel like this is where I will stop.

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FailedWriter101Author

Thank you very much for such a detailed review. I have noted your points and will do my best to improve my shortcomings

Original_EternalLv1

i believe normal humans are treated pretty well i mean just look at mc's brother

EldeelLv15

He is considered an anomaly. You can’t compare him to normal humans.

Original_Eternal:i believe normal humans are treated pretty well i mean just look at mc's brother
Generic_007Lv4

Bro literally called someone who created weapons from god's remain and many batshit crazy things a "normal human"??? Opps, spoiler but not too much...

Original_Eternal:i believe normal humans are treated pretty well i mean just look at mc's brother
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Vainglory0Lv4

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Tsukasa0Lv14

Aight, Young Sosa on the review h o *. Alright listen, if you stalking my profile and saw that MABI review where I said that I seldom review novels and see me reviewing this novel hours later then let me clarify. First, I just thought that since it's Sunday let me review all the novels that I found peak. Don't worry, after 1 or 2 reviews after this, you won't see reviews from me in a long time. Anyways, like I previously said, if you see me reviewing any novel with 5 on it, yeah it's good so just try it. PTSD (Yeah, I still can't remember the name and I'm high so just go with this) at the end. I'm not even a moderator for this novel or anything, so yeah, don't accuse me of glaz- Ring...Ring. Just a second. Yes? Oh.. Yeah, I see. I gotchu. See, it's my homie so.... KRISPY KREME DONUTS, WE GLAZIN Just kidding, my boy and this novel so good, that my genuine praise would seem like glaze to you haters. Anyways. MUSTARRRRRRRRRRRRRD! Writing Quality: Yeah, so I'll just give you blockheaders a clue. This guy, yeah, this guy named FailedWriter101 who got this roblox ahh username trying to show that he's new to the platform. For someone new, bro's got really peak writing, I can't lie. Coincidence? I think not. But then again, since when was my thinking not dumb half of the time. Wish I could be as wise and clever as Ryuk from De*** Note. In any case, the quality is peak. The author clearly knows how to write better than 80% of the writers on this platform. Just him taking minutes to reread the chapter and edit out puts him above most people. There's barely any errors. SO ITS PEAK, I DONT CARE WHAT OTHERS SAY. Sorry, didn't mean to scream. It's just that I get aired and ignored alot. In any case, the explanation, the description and everything is done in simple easy to understand, Wn-readers brain like words. Aight, next. Stability of Updates: Yeah, so if you got a problem with this, there's a door to the right. Just walk some steps. Yup, right here. Open it. Yeah, see that space outside? Get out. For someone who released multiple chapters early on to satisfy his readers (Don't worry jadey, I didn't see those tier messages), and also keeping his stability perfect till date, this deserves a big 5 star. Yup, that star that the teachers used to draw on your cheeks. Yeah, come here jadey. Let me draw it on your cheeks as well. Just not the ones on your face. Story Development: It's peak. Genuinely peak. Yeah, I know you prolly saw my Reading Status when reading this review to see how serious you can take me. Anyways, the plans, foreshadowings and how the story progresses genuinely leaves every reader wanting for much more. As an author, I, myself love how he progresses his story. This is also why whenever I want to do something in my novel I take his opinion. genuinely serious. I swear you will love it. It's never too light or too dark (who am I kidding with that mini gege pfp). Anyways, for you WN readers, I assure you will love it. Character Design: Cooked. The humor the author puts into characters genuinely makes me laugh and crash out so much that my soul flies out of my body into oblivion. .exe crashed. Pinched the red peak. Marshmallows. Yeah, chapter 24. Author definitely changed gege to za-za at that time. The character's personalities are also not annoying or make it feel unnatural at all. Neo's personality for his age is peak. Morrigan, love her. Elizabeth, hate her. World Background: For an extra story, author took a big leap here. Rather than that organizations and cliche everything, he introduced clans. Especially of Olympian Gods. How much more unique can it be? No info dumps or over explanations at all. Author really put his mind into developing the world before writing it and I love it. PTSD: Still don't remember the name, forgive me. In any case, every aspect about this story deviates from the cliche extra trops and characters and everything. Author genuinely thought that throw this all out, and we make Extra good again. After all the stains on it, author did a fresh turn and turned it into a genuinely peak 5 star meat that makes me want to swallow and eat it. HUH? Nah, I said 5 star meal bruh. Eat a 5 star meal. What you guys on? Anyways, Peak 5 star, wonderful novel. so.... GO READ!!!!! METROOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

ThefantastictouchLv4

I'm dropping this book. But not for the reasons one would expect. In fact , the story is well-written . The characters I have seen so far( except Amelia) are interseting( even elizabeth’s adopted children), the plot is slowly uncovering and the aventure promises to be exciting! But that said , this book just has too many pet peeves of mine for me to be willing to continue. First , the annoying female companion trope. Really they are not cute! To me they just mess up good books . And the fact that they are reoccuring characters makes it even harder for me to get through a read when such a character is in. Second , the " oups! It’s an opportunity for the perverted ones~" trope. Creating situations to sexualize Mc or other characters just doesn’t sit well with me . It’s not funny, it doesn’t sevre the plot , it takes away some of the charisma of the characters... So I just don’t understand the reason why so many authors like this! As of chapter 23 , there had only been two such scenes. But it was enough for me to understand that the author would continue in the same way. Third ,"all the main girls are sexually/romantically interested in Mc "trope. This is the major reason why I'm dropping this . Seeing as they are in the characters sheets , I get that Elizabeth and amelia are proeminent characters in the story. But it’s such a shame that the author made them both interested romantically in the Mc( or is at least headed this way). That’s why whenever I try to read further and I see Elizabeth is involved , I' m just unable to continue because my heart aches at the sight Of the big wasted potential she is. Can’t there ,for once, be a female main character who is not the mc’s love interest but has a great friendship with him? Neo and Elizabeth 's first meeting , ignited this hope in me. But then they went to sit naked in the divine pond and it just showed the author's intentions. It’s not a bad thing . It’s the author 's choice . The problem lies with me so I'm only expressing my feelings so that others with such pet peeves can be fixed on what to and what not to expect. Aside from all that , I still recommend this strongly to anyone the afore stated things do not annoy. And for the author :May God bless your writing journey !

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