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FrialExistence
FrialExistenceLv32mth
2024-11-05 20:45

Just an opinion after I read few chapters... the author uses purple proses a bit too much. The excessive descriptions are unnecessary and to the point of obsession. 🤢 It doesn't change at all. NOT. AT. ALL. More I read, more I get that. Overall story is good but the roundabout narration seems deliberate only to increase the number of words to reach the per chapter word quota and hence, individually the chapter lack substance. The world setting seems alright (though much wasn't revealed), the character design was likeable too, even the plot development was great. However, the purple proses are what make it shit for me. I know that only shows how dedicated the author is towards certain details but they really are unnecessary. Better to burn your brain cells on something else for efficient writing - that's what I want to say.

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Darkness_Enjoyer
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Thank you for pointing that out, as per your point this way of writing may not be for everyone to read.

Iwantocook
IwantocookLv3

i want to know your fav novels before i continue reading this . are Reverend insanity , lord of the mysteries , ss and omniscient reader's viewpoint on your fav list?

Darkness_Enjoyer:Thank you for pointing that out, as per your point this way of writing may not be for everyone to read.
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