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2024-11-04 18:31

The story feels slow, with the author constantly reiterating the same points. Initially, I had high expectations because it seemed different from the typical MC template, but unfortunately, it hasn’t delivered. I’m currently at chapter 87, and nothing significant has happened. The author could have condensed the story into 47 chapters, but instead, it stretched out with lengthy inner monologues. It’s been challenging to overlook this, though I do like the protagonist’s power concept. Since I'm still at chapter 87, I can’t comment too much on that yet. To Darkness_Enjoyer, I just hope the you can cut down on the repeated points to improve the novel. For instance, G3 often repeats explanations but does it in an engaging way, so I never think of it as "yapping." If you’re unable to make these moments engaging, it may be better to cut them down. But ultimately, it's your choice it's your novel. I'm just a reader, and I don't have any experience in writing, so I may not fully understand the challenges writers face. Regardless, I hope you do well with it.

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I will try to improve. Definitely, the feedback you are giving is important.

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