he gets brutally attacked at hogwarts, with an unforgivable no less, this results in him gaining the ability to see 'intent' toward him. this allowed him to find those who most likely did it and he does nothing. and he calls himself protag of his own life. that should tell you all you need to know
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ah yes, let's kill people in Hogwarts while his hand trembles, his body is untrained, and he knows only first year spells instead of doing it later when he has had a magical education, like his ongoing dueling training ๐ I see you've thought your criticism through
And why is his body untrained every reincarnator will work on excersing that's like common sense
Nuclide:ah yes, let's kill people in Hogwarts while his hand trembles, his body is untrained, and he knows only first year spells instead of doing it later when he has had a magical education, like his ongoing dueling training ๐ I see you've thought your criticism through
Do you not remember the multiple times itโs been revealed that his orphanage had wards to hamper him? Also he very clearly gets some get back in the same school year so how are you complaining? Especially in a review?
Caedus_Aldric:And why is his body untrained every reincarnator will work on excersing that's like common sense
please enlighten me where it says that there is wards around his orphanage that hampers his physical growth and noway in hell will dumbeldore will get angry or suspicious of mc physical excersis if mc still feels paranoid he can mask his excersis with playing sports
Hush19:Do you not remember the multiple times itโs been revealed that his orphanage had wards to hamper him? Also he very clearly gets some get back in the same school year so how are you complaining? Especially in a review?
From what I remember the wards made him lazy or something
Caedus_Aldric:please enlighten me where it says that there is wards around his orphanage that hampers his physical growth and noway in hell will dumbeldore will get angry or suspicious of mc physical excersis if mc still feels paranoid he can mask his excersis with playing sports
mope i re read chapters agin there is no mention and even if there were wards would ot not have all alerted dumbledore of his wandless magic
Hush19:From what I remember the wards made him lazy or something
a knife or poison works wonders tho. but it's not your fault the wizards and witches forget everything else once they have a wand
Nuclide:ah yes, let's kill people in Hogwarts while his hand trembles, his body is untrained, and he knows only first year spells instead of doing it later when he has had a magical education, like his ongoing dueling training ๐ I see you've thought your criticism through
While I don't think that murdering students in this particular version of Hogwarts would have any consequences at all - you did a fantastic job writing yourself into a corner in this regard with how this was handled - there are thousands of ways he could have gotten back at them besides bloody vengeance. That said, with how dark you wrote their actions to be? Yeah, Murder is fully on the table, and was just about the only thing that would satisfy someone reading for the "Assassin's Creed" in the title.
Nuclide:ah yes, let's kill people in Hogwarts while his hand trembles, his body is untrained, and he knows only first year spells instead of doing it later when he has had a magical education, like his ongoing dueling training ๐ I see you've thought your criticism through
This is what I expect when I see 'Assassin's Creed'
Kiradeux:While I don't think that murdering students in this particular version of Hogwarts would have any consequences at all - you did a fantastic job writing yourself into a corner in this regard with how this was handled - there are thousands of ways he could have gotten back at them besides bloody vengeance. That said, with how dark you wrote their actions to be? Yeah, Murder is fully on the table, and was just about the only thing that would satisfy someone reading for the "Assassin's Creed" in the title.
It is Assasins creed mixed in here. Don't do that if you are going to make the Mc a weak little bit*h. ๐ฎโ๐จ
Nuclide:ah yes, let's kill people in Hogwarts while his hand trembles, his body is untrained, and he knows only first year spells instead of doing it later when he has had a magical education, like his ongoing dueling training ๐ I see you've thought your criticism through
If you want to read stories where a 14 year old is invincible because of a system or some shit, there's plenty of other options here on webnovel. I wanted to write about character development
Guri_01_09:It is Assasins creed mixed in here. Don't do that if you are going to make the Mc a weak little bit*h. ๐ฎโ๐จ
Him being Magically weak is understandable. But Not Physically, that was just forced plot to nerf him from you. And I am not talking about him being magically weak, but personality wise. He is way too passive for you adding Assasins Creed in the mix. ๐ฎโ๐จ
Nuclide:If you want to read stories where a 14 year old is invincible because of a system or some shit, there's plenty of other options here on webnovel. I wanted to write about character development
Welp this thread definitely snuff my excitement in reading this novel
I've never liked any Harry Potter story that tries to start many years past 11. They never work out.
