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Orion_Art
Orion_ArtAuthor9mth
2024-06-28 16:52

Hello there! It seems tradition for authors to leave the first review and who am I to deny it. I'm new at writing. This is my first time writing anything seriously so I'm not sure how good or bad it will be. Though I hope you will like it. If you have any critiques and advice I'll be grateful to receive it. If you have any questions about the story, feel free to ask. As long as it's not spoilers I'll try to answer.

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ANY1977
ANY1977Lv4

Man, this is miles ahead in quality from most fanfics here , my only request is that you don't drop this story.

Orion_Art
Orion_ArtAuthor

Thanks! If there are people interested and enjoying my story then there’s no way I‘ll drop it. Plus it has been really fun writing!

ANY1977:Man, this is miles ahead in quality from most fanfics here , my only request is that you don't drop this story.
KaratePepe
KaratePepeLv4

Any romance or harem?

Orion_Art
Orion_ArtAuthor

There will definitely be romance, I just haven’t thought the details out too much yet.

KaratePepe:Any romance or harem?
Leon_Britton
Leon_BrittonLv4

make sure not to drop it, but take your time. no point rushing to make chapters.

The_reader_ofnovel
The_reader_ofnovelLv14

Are there two main characters or one and how does the story work if there is two main characters ? 🤔

Orion_Art:There will definitely be romance, I just haven’t thought the details out too much yet.
Orion_Art
Orion_ArtAuthor

Cassian is the protagonist and Nico is the deuteragonist. Basically Cassian is the main character and Nico is the secondary main character. Think of the dynamic between Gon and Killua, Naruto and Sasuke, Goku and Vegeta. It’s like that.

The_reader_ofnovel:Are there two main characters or one and how does the story work if there is two main characters ? 🤔
Lintiun8
Lintiun8Lv13

So romance 100%, but harem is not sure?

Orion_Art:There will definitely be romance, I just haven’t thought the details out too much yet.
Lintiun8
Lintiun8Lv13

I see, thanks for the reply

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Helios_Sol
Helios_SolLv5

sadly I ain't gonna touch this i don't do well with two mc like this but good luck

Orion_Art
Orion_ArtAuthor

There aren’t two mcs. The older brother is the mc, while the younger one is a deuteragonist, like Killua in hxh, Sasuke in naruto or Vegeta in db. But it’s your choice and preferences. Good luck.

Helios_Sol:sadly I ain't gonna touch this i don't do well with two mc like this but good luck
AdamFlores
AdamFloresLv4

I haven't really read the story, but the lack of harem deters me. And what you said about being 2 female leads, but it would not be centered around the MC gives a lot of Yuri vibes. To be honest, because this is a single female lead(?), then you have to be careful about who you choose to be that lead. If it was a goddess like Hestia, then I believe most people would be satisfied. However, if you choose that lead to be any random adventurer like Lily, Haruhime, or even Ais... Then most people wouldn't like it because their favorite 'waifu' didn't get chosen. Yes, a harem done right requires skill. But in worlds like DxD and Danmachi, I believe it is a must... Unless you choose the strongest and most liked female, in which case I have nothing to complain about I personally tend to avoid fanfictions that take place in a harem world, but where the MC doesn't make a harem.... Not because he can't, but because the Author forces that on him. In harem worlds like Danmachi and DxD, there are only two options- a harem, or no romance at all. If you don't have the confidence to make a harem done right, then you should not develop romance at all. Instead, you should focus on the MC's development- either in character or strenght.

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FinnsRevenge
FinnsRevengeLv4

Two reincarnators and possible yuri garbage? nah, good luck though

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absolue
absolueLv13

Bruh it disgusts me, polyamours and partner sharing, with yuri garbage

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Orion_Art
Orion_ArtAuthor

absolue:Bruh it disgusts me, polyamours and partner sharing, with yuri garbage
Orion_Art
Orion_ArtAuthor

I appreciate the advice but I don’t find it disgusting as long as it’s two women. Even more so when it makes sense. But I’m undecided about romance and what form it should take, so I’ve decided that when the time comes, I’ll ask the readers and have them vote about what they would prefer.

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absolue
absolueLv13

To each his own, personally I hate anything that comes close to partner sharing and ntr, whether it's a woman or a man.

Orion_Art:I appreciate the advice but I don’t find it disgusting as long as it’s two women. Even more so when it makes sense. But I’m undecided about romance and what form it should take, so I’ve decided that when the time comes, I’ll ask the readers and have them vote about what they would prefer.
Orion_Art
Orion_ArtAuthor

I respect your opinion, I guess it’s just a difference in ideologies. I share your hatred for ntr and partner sharing, but it doesn’t extend to two women who you are in a relationship with. Though if it was a random woman your partner sleeps with, then I consider that cheating and ntr.

absolue:To each his own, personally I hate anything that comes close to partner sharing and ntr, whether it's a woman or a man.
Orion_Art
Orion_ArtAuthor

I respect your opinion, I guess it’s just a difference in ideologies. I share your hatred for ntr and partner sharing, but it doesn’t extend to two women you’re in a relationship with. Though I would consider cheating and ntr if your partner slept with a random woman.

absolue:To each his own, personally I hate anything that comes close to partner sharing and ntr, whether it's a woman or a man.
absolue
absolueLv13

And then there's much less chance and sense in doing that than in making a harem, knowing that in this world there are no l*sb***s apart from Loki, but then again she's just making jokes.

Orion_Art:I respect your opinion, I guess it’s just a difference in ideologies. I share your hatred for ntr and partner sharing, but it doesn’t extend to two women who you are in a relationship with. Though if it was a random woman your partner sleeps with, then I consider that cheating and ntr.
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