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DylanHusand
DylanHusandAuthor10mth
2024-06-09 22:56

I think i will focus to this novel, what i wanted to do.

Increase Talent: Become More Stronger!

DylanHusand
4.3
220 Chs

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Vainglory0
Vainglory0Lv4

how big is the harem going to be?

9mth
DylanHusand
DylanHusandAuthor

below 8? idk

Vainglory0:how big is the harem going to be?
9mth
Edhant
EdhantLv4

do you have a release schedule?

DylanHusand:below 8? idk
8mth
DylanHusand
DylanHusandAuthor

i need time

Edhant:do you have a release schedule?
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DylanHusand
DylanHusandAuthor

i will keep it in this time

Edhant:do you have a release schedule?
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Flipped_123
Flipped_123Lv15

Tip for author* You can’t say “More stronger” in the title The adjective strong when written as stronger is already “more strong”. So saying more stronger is like saying “more more strong”, which doesn’t make any sense. Side note: You can replace “more” with “much” in the original titel and it will be a coherent sentence.

4mth
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DylanHusand
DylanHusandAuthor

that was not intersting if putting much i more like this

Flipped_123:Tip for author* You can’t say “More stronger” in the title The adjective strong when written as stronger is already “more strong”. So saying more stronger is like saying “more more strong”, which doesn’t make any sense. Side note: You can replace “more” with “much” in the original titel and it will be a coherent sentence.
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Last_Fables
Last_FablesLv15

I can tell English isn't your first language, but saying more stronger...is bad writing. I wish you well on your book, but after struggling through the first 4 chapters, I am dropping it. the POV is all over the place. It is hard to keep track of who is doing what. it just doesn't seem like it will improve. It is not structured well at all.

DylanHusand:that was not intersting if putting much i more like this
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DylanHusand
DylanHusandAuthor

u right

Last_Fables:I can tell English isn't your first language, but saying more stronger...is bad writing. I wish you well on your book, but after struggling through the first 4 chapters, I am dropping it. the POV is all over the place. It is hard to keep track of who is doing what. it just doesn't seem like it will improve. It is not structured well at all.
4mth
DylanHusand
DylanHusandAuthor

i knew it, my first plan is i want developing mc story then main arc where mc going to imperial. I dont care about all for now i only want to made mc became more strongest than his ex-friends.

Last_Fables:I can tell English isn't your first language, but saying more stronger...is bad writing. I wish you well on your book, but after struggling through the first 4 chapters, I am dropping it. the POV is all over the place. It is hard to keep track of who is doing what. it just doesn't seem like it will improve. It is not structured well at all.
4mth
DylanHusand
DylanHusandAuthor

Sorry for who dont like this novel i doing this just for myself

3mth
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Alanray64
Alanray64Lv15

It just needs solid proofreading and you releasing chapters as such, unchecked, drives people away. If it is your work then take some pride in it. As it stands it is a travesty of writing as potentially it does have some interesting thoughts. Yet not acknowledging this is an injustice. I am stopping here as I really cannot go on hoping for a miraculous change. Perhaps as a suggestion, go back and re-edit every chapter and correct those mistakes. Seriously calling a child a man is messed up, and put more into the sentence length rather than making them feel clipped.

2mth
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Abhishek_Kumar_1794
Abhishek_Kumar_1794Lv10

story is good can you tell which chapter he will do face reveal,please...its too much suspense and please improve your language and grammer, i think you can take help of chatgpt,

15d
Abhishek_Kumar_1794
Abhishek_Kumar_1794Lv10

will eris and alice will eventually be in harem i want the beta hero to be alone and cucked

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dndeath
dndeathLv14

there is basically a 50 chapter prologue that feels barely coherent which makes it very hard to get into unfortunately...

4mth

Krishna_Oza_0838
Krishna_Oza_0838Lv3

Well, lets start with bad things and then good things. 1- Writing quality is good if we consider the grammer and such but its written in a way that is very hard to understand what is happening. Like in starting chapters you are referring the opponent az 'That man ' or 'the man' but you can give more info on why is he bulling them. what are girls thinking. not just what their eyes are doing. one more thing is like sometimes the story just braks in between and then whusshh its back on track but missing few important parts. 2- character design can be improved. give more info abt the characters. in the early chaps the characters are like dolls talking with each other. next is dialogue. if you're putting it a POV please put a mark so we understand who are we looking the story from. 3- the good part is the story has good premise and power levels untill i read. so keep up for unique ideas. 4- i dont know abt updating stabilty so full 5 star for that. 5- world background is decently intriduced as story peogresses but as mentioned above the story just breaks in between and that just takes focus away from the story. A pointer- the story feels monotonous and its boring that way. try to have interactions of character and not just this happened and after that that happened. anyway, this is just my opinion. keep up the good work 👍.

4mth
Andre_Oliveira_5287
Andre_Oliveira_5287Lv10

Enfadonho enfadonho..... Sem sentido algum... Veja bem um cara que era adulto ...morreu e reencarnou ... E agora no novo mundo ele chora com um bebe, e se comporta como uma criança que faz birra...sério...tava tentando continuar mas não deu.... Birra de um homem de sei lá que idade em um corpo de criança pq o irmão vai embora. Afff

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Kakarot_6586
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Tohka_Chan
Tohka_ChanLv1

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DumbAuthorStupid
DumbAuthorStupidLv2

enough for me to say this story will became best fantasy although at first until 63 chapter just only have 600 words but its ok

3mth
HL005
HL005Lv4

I am sorry but the MC is too childish for a grown reincarnated MAN , it’s. Understandable that he has trauma issues but not this extent to act like child and cry about everything , he acts cold to 2 little girls who are 4 or 5 years old and they don’t like him ,usually kids don’t like those who are cold to them that’s why they like that Ash guy , it would have been better if you removed the rebirth part from your story so that the MC would have reason for the way he behave

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Lord_Han_jue
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Lawliet_angeline
Lawliet_angelineLv1

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