Alanray64

Again with a previously repeated phrase?

When was she told about the System? There appears to be inconsistencies appearing showing.

Are you just repeating comments from the first time? There has now been a number of repeated phrases and comments showing as story progresses. It begins to lack originality or appear more AI in delivery.

I found it pretty good. Not overdrawn and enough information to convey the fight details. Would have maybe preferred more information on his rewards. Eg Knight Card? What is it, summons etc

Sounds familiar from earlier

Pretty good read here, to the extent I binged all in one go. Enjoyed the wit and sarcasm banter used between the family dynamics. Will add this one to follow with interest. Only disappointment is with 60 accessible chapters, there is over 50 in premium which is far to much. A reader will not hang around wait for chapters to drip out and remain engaged with the story dynamics and remember it all. I would have accepted say 2-10, maybe 20 chapters in premium (a lot I read on,y have 2 in premium) but 50 just seemed more a cash grab than entertaining readers. Overall it’s a decent read.

Why not use spatial travel since he made an anchor home if I recall right.

That is pretty low, virtually infinitely impossible. Maybe give it a 2% chance to sound like a very small chance of success. Still, enjoying the read.

Arrogant egotist. It is everyone’s else fault but never his. Rather amusing..