Alanray64

What has this got to do with the Air Force?

An extremely racist novel. It is a very interesting the story with its planet system and has a lot of potential, just cannot get past all the racism within. Be nice if they toned it down.

195? Is that his now theoretical life span?

Well enough said. Do your best👍

Geez that is depressing.. feel like saying Nigel no friends 😂 Well I am sure you can find someone, suffice to say you should have at least one confident. Just don’t the chance 👍

Well maybe one of your peers, other authors etc. you will find it invaluable and potentially thought provoking if given ideas. It is worth a try 👍

Fair enough. Just don’t take it personally otherwise it will affect your mindset on writing. Take it as constructive criticism.. you could always ask a mate to read over your writings to help before posting chapters.

Hey if you wanna improve then look at the free editing you are getting. Readers like a smooth ride not a lot of bumps which are jarring. I’ve skipped a number of them if I recall, but that one was quite bad 👍

..a thought appeared in my mind.. Very bad grammar

Ooo now I’m getting it. Good stuff 👍