Well, lets start with bad things and then good things. 1- Writing quality is good if we consider the grammer and such but its written in a way that is very hard to understand what is happening. Like in starting chapters you are referring the opponent az 'That man ' or 'the man' but you can give more info on why is he bulling them. what are girls thinking. not just what their eyes are doing. one more thing is like sometimes the story just braks in between and then whusshh its back on track but missing few important parts. 2- character design can be improved. give more info abt the characters. in the early chaps the characters are like dolls talking with each other. next is dialogue. if you're putting it a POV please put a mark so we understand who are we looking the story from. 3- the good part is the story has good premise and power levels untill i read. so keep up for unique ideas. 4- i dont know abt updating stabilty so full 5 star for that. 5- world background is decently intriduced as story peogresses but as mentioned above the story just breaks in between and that just takes focus away from the story. A pointer- the story feels monotonous and its boring that way. try to have interactions of character and not just this happened and after that that happened. anyway, this is just my opinion. keep up the good work 👍.

I think i will focus to this novel, what i wanted to do.

Enfadonho enfadonho..... Sem sentido algum... Veja bem um cara que era adulto ...morreu e reencarnou ... E agora no novo mundo ele chora com um bebe, e se comporta como uma criança que faz birra...sério...tava tentando continuar mas não deu.... Birra de um homem de sei lá que idade em um corpo de criança pq o irmão vai embora. Afff

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enough for me to say this story will became best fantasy although at first until 63 chapter just only have 600 words but its ok

I am sorry but the MC is too childish for a grown reincarnated MAN , it’s. Understandable that he has trauma issues but not this extent to act like child and cry about everything , he acts cold to 2 little girls who are 4 or 5 years old and they don’t like him ,usually kids don’t like those who are cold to them that’s why they like that Ash guy , it would have been better if you removed the rebirth part from your story so that the MC would have reason for the way he behave

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