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didn’t go all out* Or Hadn’t gone all out*

caused his body to freeze*

creatire’s eyes/gaze locked* little did he know*

Tip for author* You can’t say “More stronger” in the title The adjective strong when written as stronger is already “more strong”. So saying more stronger is like saying “more more strong”, which doesn’t make any sense. Side note: You can replace “more” with “much” in the original titel and it will be a coherent sentence.

This novel has very good grammar, it is pleasent to read and only suffers from slight repetition with certain words and sentences. The first 13 chapters are confusing and the action is somewhat hard to follow, but it sets up a background for future development, so please read all the free chapters before deciding to continue or not. Because the story is actually quite good so far and has lots of potential. Author i hope that you continue to include the other characters in a meaningful way, because i wory this will become a story where the mc is the only one capable of handling things. Such a story can quickly become boring and repetitive. Otherwise you are doing a good job, make sure there is character development as the story progresses. *I like how sirius actually cries a lot, since he is a kid that makes him realistic as well, some authors just make the mc emotionless beasts from the beginning.

Strike hard, fast and eliminate* Strike and hit are the same thing, so you shouldn’t repeat it

Unique story with good writing and character development. Not enough chapters. No matter who you are, this stroy will give you a good experience.

Saw the story had a new chapter. Just wanted to say that i very much enjoy this story and i hope it can continue.

The stupidity of the masses and*

Streaks*