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venom_hunt_041199
venom_hunt_041199Lv48mth
2024-08-22 06:49

it clearly needs more character development and the plot is reverting to your same old style. it is also so 2013. your story design and romantic ventures are good for bit style play, but completely fails from the propective of story-side novel view. I used to like your stories very much but now I find them going through the same old cliques. girls falling for the fake bravado act of protags and protags screwing friends gf's by some hypocritical moral superiority. and most importantly haircuts does change a person's look but not his personality and others perspective( one of your main cliques, it does help a persons own self-esteem though). also stop trying to make the protag a pariah when he is some loser who got lucky by getting a system and feels like he is losing out by getting a girlfriend. I mean it is harem story but try to develop each character's story so that they won't feel like empty text.

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I_Love_Hina
I_Love_HinaLv14

you should go to see his discord. He sometimes replies after some time

Salted_Kastle
Salted_KastleLv4

what's the link?

I_Love_Hina:you should go to see his discord. He sometimes replies after some time
EnlightenedDummy
EnlightenedDummyLv4

cant really see him changing stuff since its his whole gimmick.

CaveSquirrel
CaveSquirrelLv4

WN hates links

Salted_Kastle:what's the link?
JoyousRebellion
JoyousRebellionLv1

Nah I don't believe he will ever change his style. I was there when he wrote start by becoming a mangaka years ago and he has not changed at all, his protags have been becoming more scummy i think. They be having internal monologues justifying their actions with some shity reasoning

Golden_dragoon
Golden_dragoonLv4

how did you even join it then?

CaveSquirrel:WN hates links
Nyxio
NyxioLv11

Agreed. Such a shame. I think only lonely teenagers would like his books now.

JoyousRebellion:Nah I don't believe he will ever change his style. I was there when he wrote start by becoming a mangaka years ago and he has not changed at all, his protags have been becoming more scummy i think. They be having internal monologues justifying their actions with some shity reasoning
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DaoistjQtMkq
DaoistjQtMkqLv3

Author can you make another villain mc novel please.

Phearow
PhearowLv4

To be fair it's not likely he gets any positive reinforcement to improve from his braindead audience. As someone said earlier "lonely teenagers".

DaoistU7cpKo
DaoistU7cpKoLv4

honestly the only one I still remember it sis con because that one had a good plot and sometimes have to skip the main world because it's almost all cringe but he did really good on the other worlds and the protagonist being literally terrified to build a harem so it didn't go over 10 in the first 500 if I remember correctly

JoyousRebellion:Nah I don't believe he will ever change his style. I was there when he wrote start by becoming a mangaka years ago and he has not changed at all, his protags have been becoming more scummy i think. They be having internal monologues justifying their actions with some shity reasoning
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masterkiritojj
masterkiritojjLv2

Is there Yuri in this novel?

Ray_Alseif
Ray_AlseifLv1

Most of those who enjoyed Akikan novels aren’t those who are into Shounen Genres with character developments, Mc lesser screen time, weak to grow, getting ass kicked by side character from time time, well, I preferred this version of protagonist from Akikan, everyone have different tastes right since this Scumbag Mc was the protagonist I preferred so nothing wrong with that. If some guys hated it, they should just quit and go to read original Version don’t bother here!

DaoistflTMU7
DaoistflTMU7Lv2

Lemon❓🤔👀

BadAuthor
BadAuthorLv1

MrDegenerate
MrDegenerateLv13

The points above suspiciously resemble a certain real-life rapper who is a known homewrecker (ahem Aubrey Graham ahem)

Ireallylikereading
IreallylikereadingLv4

guys i dropped a few months ago, i just remembered kei shirogane and if she is a love interest i probably will come back, can someone please tell me if she is?

Ireallylikereading
IreallylikereadingLv4

you forgot to mention how he looks down on peoples waifus, seriously if your aiming for their mothers or something please dont ruin happy families but go for the bad ones.

BurglarOfTurds
BurglarOfTurdsLv15

I recognize this name lol

I_Love_Hina:you should go to see his discord. He sometimes replies after some time
fallen_reaper_001
fallen_reaper_001Lv4

nascent klaedoscope is a really good one, I look for something like that, but it's really difficult to find such pieces at this platform. if you guys have some suggestions for works like that , plz do recommend

H75_N
H75_NLv4

looking Forward to Another World

fallen_reaper_001:nascent klaedoscope is a really good one, I look for something like that, but it's really difficult to find such pieces at this platform. if you guys have some suggestions for works like that , plz do recommend
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