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please keep updating. the premise, background and quip remarks of each character looks unique.

really man, try pairing up momo x Natsu. I mean momo is Lucy's replica in mha. they are both studious, rich and serious woman with exceptional fanservice. I could very well imagine natsu and happy messing up momo's peace and making her merry with their shenanigans.

finally a good fanfic to wait for. both innovative, interesting, funny and perfect balance of dark content. I really love it. it tops my top 3 of favorite fanfics.

a bit of romance with one or two would really help with the character development. I know it is really hard to create a Well written harem story but I believe you can do it. I mean there are only few goood fairy tail fanfics, and you have written one of best. my favorite is momo and Mina. they both have the perks and characterstics of lucy. It would also help if you could expand on the day to day life of the characters giving them more character development. I hope you finish this fanfic.

be happy it is not aot

it clearly needs more character development and the plot is reverting to your same old style. it is also so 2013. your story design and romantic ventures are good for bit style play, but completely fails from the propective of story-side novel view. I used to like your stories very much but now I find them going through the same old cliques. girls falling for the fake bravado act of protags and protags screwing friends gf's by some hypocritical moral superiority. and most importantly haircuts does change a person's look but not his personality and others perspective( one of your main cliques, it does help a persons own self-esteem though). also stop trying to make the protag a pariah when he is some loser who got lucky by getting a system and feels like he is losing out by getting a girlfriend. I mean it is harem story but try to develop each character's story so that they won't feel like empty text.

mine was wanting to be a vigilante.

actually overdose depends on persons. People who ODed flatline sometime due to their heart failure or kidney shutting down. but there is also a special case of heart failure caused by heart attack due to panic and hallucinations. in this case People live their darkest nightmares or most darkest desires. just imagine your mind forcing you to believe to be drowning in water while your body struggles to breathe due to you vomiting or aspirating causing you to panic and making your situation more worse. you will go into a coma due to your brain not receiving enough oxygen. it is just a case or a big what if. but remember it is a possibility. and this special case is quite comman to people who are obese or People with weak lungs.

mc became a pushover. the fmc's dont know nothing about personal space