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DaoistKSbLenLv13mth
2024-10-01 19:42

Ok, so, several points! It's similar to shadow slave , that's a positive thing, unfortunately it didn't got me because the writing has some inconsistencies. 1) It lacks context and environmental description. The fight in the forest, what forest, what treas for example? How a boy that always lived in a asteroid ( mining) knows what a forest or treas are if he doesn't even know what horses are? 2) He has a fight with a wild carnivorous 1meter tall rabbit. The rabbit slices and wounds his leg. He defeats the rabbit. And then proceeds to run for 20km???? With a wounded leg??? 20km??? 3) He was in a camp with 1000 people, was the only survivor of a monster attack. Later he defeats the rabbit there. He skins the rabbit ( in like 10min?) and makes a bag with his skin. Lol ( without waiting to dry the blood? To do a bag like this you need to dry the skiing for days), and in the middle of thousands of death people he couldn't find a bag? No one had a bag? Incongruity like this gets me out of the reading completely. And it continues on and on.

Primordial Expanse: I have the Strongest Talent!

TheUngod
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519 Chs

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TheUngod
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Art_Show
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my best book , really i love this book, i think you can give one chance , dont be hesitate, will be a rising star over time [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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Zook_51
Zook_51Lv15

the author took huge inspiration from "Shadow Slave" and then made it entirely their own... This story is awesome, worth reading and adding to your library!

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DeadpanDeme
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Fiaran
FiaranLv14

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Potato_Big
Potato_BigLv3

bro NGL i haven't read the novel but the cover is sick man

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Beluinus
BeluinusLv15

I was tremendously enjoying the story and looking forward to how far the MC can go. But I just couldn't anymore. The world building was decent, with showing that both worlds are different enough and have different societies. It's basically a cut and paste of the beginning of and rough semantics of Shadow Slave, something the autor himself admitted. But the MC is just stupid. Repeatedly. Constantly forgets abilities he has, and has so many Ex Machinas to save his life in fights he should have no business participating in. Then you're constantly slapped in the face, over and over, about how special MC is. Like how much stronger for his level he is, and how much potential he has compared to others.

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New_6151
New_6151Lv1

Its good. Felt a little like shadow slave but thats not a bad thing. The pacing is great to.

5mth
sergioh1t
sergioh1tLv13

[Alert Spoiler - Cap 121] Does the MC have a hero complex, or is he just stupid? This cave arc is really annoying me—I was really enjoying this story, but now I'm not sure if I should continue. I'll probably read a few more chapters, though... Why is the MC going to fight someone he knows almost nothing about, who has a high chance of killing him? To save people in a world he knows very little about? It's worth noting that he can already return to his own universe—he's completed his objective. He could even just go train somewhere else if he doesn't want to go back yet... But no, he prefers to risk his life constantly and in every possible way.

4mth
GreyH
GreyHLv4

A pretty good and interesting story , the fights are not dragged too much which is what I like. The characters are fleshed out and have different personalities , the bad guys or the villains are not dumb they have their own schemes and stuff. The mc is a teenager who was not exposed to the outer world so he is a little naive but certainly not dumb and he adapts very quickly so him being dumb won't be a problem . Overall a pretty interesting story and good easy to read writing make it a must read if you like these types of story. Pretty excited to see where this story will go. SPOILER AHEAD !!! Message for Author - Keep going Author your work is certainly a top tier , Also I like the way how Alex and Mira relationship is going . I would certainly like to see their relation grow more . And maybe how they fight together in duo .

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