The sheer amount of heresy in this is quite ridiculous. Changing the og shadow keeper custodian armor was dumb. The writing quality took a severe down turn after the first 5 chapters. It quickly devolved into a power fic incredibly quickly. Now I wouldn’t have a problem with that if wasn’t done so poorly. This is not to mention this custodian has no loyalty to the Emperor at all. Like if you wanted to do that just make the Mc a Primarch. As a Dc fic this is as generic as it gets. As a Warhammer fic it’s not just terrible it’s just vile heresy.
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Why would he be loyal to the Emperor? He isn’t a true Custodes and being loyal to someone else is dumb.
Your lack of loyalty is concerning. How about to your parents? Your spouse? Your child? Your benefactors? Loyalty is a foundation for any real love whether it be romantic or familial. Your character just seems to lack any loyalty. Do you?
A_Real_Werewolf234:Why would he be loyal to the Emperor? He isn’t a true Custodes and being loyal to someone else is dumb.
That is implied dude. I meant loyalty to someone else(Emperor) who does not exist in DC. There is no need to have loyalty to him. The rest are obvious.
Aady_Shrestha:Your lack of loyalty is concerning. How about to your parents? Your spouse? Your child? Your benefactors? Loyalty is a foundation for any real love whether it be romantic or familial. Your character just seems to lack any loyalty. Do you?
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A_Real_Werewolf234:That is implied dude. I meant loyalty to someone else(Emperor) who does not exist in DC. There is no need to have loyalty to him. The rest are obvious.
I feel this review has the shadow of Tzeentch, he is trying to use mind games to turn us against each other...
Not as far as I’m aware but honestly who knows, this could be a part of his 30 step plan that leads to the birth of the Dark king. Or take it at face value and see an honest review.
PsyLoRD:I feel this review has the shadow of Tzeentch, he is trying to use mind games to turn us against each other...
Custodes are created to be loyal exclusively to the Emperor, the Emperor himself can see the future and will not take a traitor, Custodes cannot betray him because they are created that way on purpose
A_Real_Werewolf234:That is implied dude. I meant loyalty to someone else(Emperor) who does not exist in DC. There is no need to have loyalty to him. The rest are obvious.
He literaly asked the goddess to remove that aspect.
Len_Stoff:Custodes are created to be loyal exclusively to the Emperor, the Emperor himself can see the future and will not take a traitor, Custodes cannot betray him because they are created that way on purpose
All space marine в warhammer 40,000 The eunuchs, especially custodes big e, didn't want them to be able to reproduce
A_Real_Werewolf234:He literaly asked the goddess to remove that aspect.
That is the thing, Space Marines don’t have their junks removed. A inquisitor saw a Grey Knight in the Shower and he was intact
Len_Stoff: All space marine в warhammer 40,000 The eunuchs, especially custodes big e, didn't want them to be able to reproduce
haha soldiers and citizicienf of countries would laugh at you you country less bumpkin
A_Real_Werewolf234:Why would he be loyal to the Emperor? He isn’t a true Custodes and being loyal to someone else is dumb.
I love my country the United States, I am loyal to my family, my friends. When I made this statement, I was saying ‘why would he be loyal to someone else’ As in, someone who is not in the reality he is in, The Emperor. He even asked to remove ingrained loyalty to The Emperor.
Sky_Demon_Order:haha soldiers and citizicienf of countries would laugh at you you country less bumpkin
Bro, there's no point trying to argue with these guys, they don't care about the reason, for them everything should be as it is in the original Warhammer work, they have no sense of creativity and don't even understand that this is a fanfic, and that you decide how she continues, this becomes clear when they make arguments like: "if he doesn't have loyalty to the Emperor, he and you have no loyalty to anything, etc. etc. etc." lol, the Emperor doesn't even exist in DC, and who with a conscience would want to be someone else's slave? hahaha
A_Real_Werewolf234:I love my country the United States, I am loyal to my family, my friends. When I made this statement, I was saying ‘why would he be loyal to someone else’ As in, someone who is not in the reality he is in, The Emperor. He even asked to remove ingrained loyalty to The Emperor.
Very true, I just dislike how they instantly go ‘this sucks, if he doesn’t have loyalty to the Emperor he is a fake’ Blah, blah, blah
Cultivator_Asura:Bro, there's no point trying to argue with these guys, they don't care about the reason, for them everything should be as it is in the original Warhammer work, they have no sense of creativity and don't even understand that this is a fanfic, and that you decide how she continues, this becomes clear when they make arguments like: "if he doesn't have loyalty to the Emperor, he and you have no loyalty to anything, etc. etc. etc." lol, the Emperor doesn't even exist in DC, and who with a conscience would want to be someone else's slave? hahaha
point taken
A_Real_Werewolf234:I love my country the United States, I am loyal to my family, my friends. When I made this statement, I was saying ‘why would he be loyal to someone else’ As in, someone who is not in the reality he is in, The Emperor. He even asked to remove ingrained loyalty to The Emperor.
This is late but I’ll explain the main grips with 40k fans on these type of fanfics. If the Mc isn’t Loyal to the Emperor then why be a Custodes? They are paragons of loyalty literally built to be unable to deny the Emperor. Keeping him loyal isn’t putting a cap on creativity it’s rather creating the chance for a much interesting setting. However removing a Custodes loyalty to the Emperor is removing what makes them a Custodes. It’s plain lazy writing and makes the character and story more shallow. At that point it would be better if the Mc was just a space marine or a primarch.
Cultivator_Asura:Bro, there's no point trying to argue with these guys, they don't care about the reason, for them everything should be as it is in the original Warhammer work, they have no sense of creativity and don't even understand that this is a fanfic, and that you decide how she continues, this becomes clear when they make arguments like: "if he doesn't have loyalty to the Emperor, he and you have no loyalty to anything, etc. etc. etc." lol, the Emperor doesn't even exist in DC, and who with a conscience would want to be someone else's slave? hahaha
The abilities of the race, along with the potential that comes with the Emperor's blood.
Aady_Shrestha:This is late but I’ll explain the main grips with 40k fans on these type of fanfics. If the Mc isn’t Loyal to the Emperor then why be a Custodes? They are paragons of loyalty literally built to be unable to deny the Emperor. Keeping him loyal isn’t putting a cap on creativity it’s rather creating the chance for a much interesting setting. However removing a Custodes loyalty to the Emperor is removing what makes them a Custodes. It’s plain lazy writing and makes the character and story more shallow. At that point it would be better if the Mc was just a space marine or a primarch.
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