I like the start and I like the concept of two high fantasy worlds with different eldritch beings interracting. Like while Momonga was a human, the longer he stayed in the Overlord body, the lower his morals started to drop and with LotM Sequence systems, the higher you go, the more you have to anchor yourself to not lose your humanity. I see great potential in this, hope you keep this fanfic going and deliver us something great.

Really enjoyed it I hope for more in the future, though don't overwork yourself if you are already.

It's just a lot of graphomania. The author clearly enjoys describing things, but not writing story. Feelings that appear out of nowhere, the main character with the eighth-grader syndrome, 80% of the entire text is useless information. Several dozen NPCs with several pages of descriptions and zero story value, the main character who just does things without a purpose... Why? Just to practice your writing? I hope the answer is yes, because if THIS is supposed to be a STORY...

Changing mc's destination is not only fooling him, but also readers. Bruce is just jumping through places with no reason to do anything - plotline is just dead after siege on his guild.

A great fanfic... so please don't drop this

Writing quality: great work by the author he doesnt just do the same spells as shown in overlord, the guy has literally created spells and added lore to them and also shown which boss rewards it is he has done some plot twists that are good still his first time he will grow into it but as for a first time writer good work. Updating stability: my last comment of this fanfic was for him to store up chapters soooooo I can’t say anything I’m just here waiting for a mass release. Story development: great use of Yggdrasil and great character creation in the game from getting his own guild to ensuring he has the number one spot to even the number of floors in his guild is just crazy work author has put in the effort the different floors, the different characters used really something. Character design: what can I say one more the descriptions are good and the designs of the worlds sound great. World background: wonderful he really expounded on new elements of the game Yggdrasil. I really enjoyed the Yggdrasil arc especially the gameplay and how he handled things, really great world background even in the new arcs that the story has progressed through he did his research. Overall good story new writer but he is trying his best and is doing well.

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The overall premise of the story is great. Hope you continue this novel. Starting two characters look great.

This story is mediocre, neither particularly good nor bad. If I had to pinpoint an issue, it would be the protagonist's personality—it’s honestly terrible. It’s no wonder he got betrayed, or if he didn’t, his insecurities about himself certainly make it seem inevitable. The AI's name being "World" is just ridiculous. If you can’t come up with a good name, just use Google or something generic like that. And asking it to call him "S"? That’s just absurd and makes the protagonist look foolish. Speaking of the protagonist, his personality is completely trash. Why is he in the DC Universe when he should be in the Overlord world? Furthermore, he could use his unlimited money to create something beneficial for the people in world he’s in before leaving, but I get the impression he’s the greedy type who wouldn’t give a single cent because of his insecurities. It’s frustrating to have such an annoying main character.

porque le das al mc algo que despues se lo vas a quitar? es tan cliche que da asco, literalmente los ultimos capitulos del segundo arco eran muy aburridos y despues me sales con la mamada de que le vas a quitar su gremio, ya se que es tu primera novela pero si vas a quitarle algo o nerfear al mc no lo hubieras dado tantas fuerzas al principio ptt: el tercer arco es aburrido, pones mas a otros personajes que al mc que es el protagonista