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NitrogenousBeing
NitrogenousBeingLv143mth
2024-10-22 01:48

This book is ONLY a decent beginning of a book. It lays out an interesting fantasy setting and stretches the intro plot on forever. It gives readers the feeling it will become something good, but it never does. If the plot developed, it might be a good novel - That’s a major reason for its success. But as it stands, it’s the nutritionally empty junk food of webnovels. Below is a list of other rambly criticisms: 1. The writing is monotone. This is especially noticeable with characters who share speech mannerisms to an alarming degree. It is acceptable at first when everything is new and local, but as international cultures are introduced its nature as a flaw comes to light.  2. Character worldviews and attitudes are generic. All characters (even leaders, foreign countries, and “gods”) fall into two sets, “generic beast companion” and “generic humanoid.” These sets govern nearly all tones, mannerisms, attitudes, and thoughts.  3. Hundreds of chapters in its still 100% training arc. No real antagonists. Even “wars” against “faceless” giant monsters reads like a training arc. 4. The book is padded out to be a “slice of life.” It sacrifices progress (aside from strength increases) for semi-repetitive good-vibe moments. If you buy into the inside joke-like style these scenes might give you a little dopamine rush. Otherwise, it’s incredibly stale and predictable made worse by the monotone voice everyone has. 5. Other than the initial sudden twists (like a trial jumping out of nowhere), it’s too predictable. 6. Although the world’s mystery was intriguing for a long time, what is revealed over time is less interesting than I had hoped. (This is a common issue with many books where the initial concept the author adopted was obscured by a more interesting concept that never gets fully realized) I’ve rambled enough. I read this a while ago and only reviewed it now because it's been pinned to the top of my library for two days and I’m tired of it.  Should you read this book? Maybe. I did once and I don’t anymore. Keep in mind that it’s super junk food and in the end, you will probably be unfulfilled. If you’re fine with that, enjoy the sickly sweet flavor stretching on forever.

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Usew
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I totally agree with you. There's no tension, no conflict. The tone never feels serious, everyone just has the same witty attitude. I feel like I'm reading a bad marvel movie/serie.

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I took a chance and spent more than Two Thousand Coins in one go to read this novel. The story is about a young man named Karl and his journey as a Beast Master in an Academy. The initial onset of the story is intriguing, and you give allowances for pacing, detail, and depth in the beginning of all novels as an author is just started to build the world. There are no major mistakes of writing being done in this novel, which is great news. Spelling is great, and the author never uses a larger unknown word when a simple one will suffice. The novel world building leaves you with the initial impression that the world is less advanced, but in fact, it is just geographical to the main character circumstance. The descriptions of people, places, and things is on par for a webnovel, which is to say lacking. I found it lacking in description, and that hurts world immersion. Pacing wise the story is a race to the finish but you are not quiet sure if it is actually moving fast or not because there is no overarching goal for the main character unless you count getting stronger of which Karl does very fast. Let me ask the question: Who is the antagonist? The main mystery is the System, the ancient power of the world dragon. In this Karl is unravelling the mystery faster than anyone has in hundreds of thousands of years. So yes, the story is lacking in sub-plots. Absolutely. The Magic system and Training. Arguably, one of the reasons many of us read these novels and we as an audience are hypercritical, but of course, we are a paying audience. There is a system that the character is trying to unlock, but is is only partially unlocked. Karl is only able to use some of his powers, but training is not confined by these limitations, yet the guy never really trains in any discipline. The initial experience of the academy was not enough to warrant his skills. I could go in more detail but as an audience member following along in the novel I found myself not being able to believe Karl was actually skilled. The written Style of Battle Karl as a Beast Master is endowed with skills such as Rend, and with some training and adjustment, he seems to be able to manipulate Rend and use it in different ways. I for one love this it is absolutely the greatest. You see this in the best novels written by the most creative writer on this platform. Yet the written battle style plays out like an MMO damage dealing scene...=( It is disappointing. If there was a build up of written word that showcased Karl's training dedication to some kind of martial discipline you would not be able to see it from the way the battles are written. They follow a buff, attack, shield, suprise and win format. Karl as a written character has not really grown. His rank has gone from Awakened to Commander leaving Royal, Monarch and Overlord left more if they haven't been reached or mentioned but has Karl grown? Nah, not really. At this point Karl has just reached Commander Rank. Write the character into some training give his skill set some depth and show us the ingenuity of him learning to use his skills outside the box. There are some incredible novels on here Aoki this can be one of them. That said, you're finding success as is so yeah Good luck.

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