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2024-04-16 13:17

Pacing is great on this story but there are more than a few inconsistencies that made me quit reading the story, despite having the funds to purchase additional chapters. The main inconsistency was John’s purpose to conceal his talent, becoming the top awakened in his age group secretly, but ends up blatantly revealing himself and all of his skills and potential to Seraphina, because he says “I like to hunt with women.” Moreover, this fact is proven that he solely did this because she is a woman when he hastily agrees to share his exp, further shortening the gap between him and her for a measly 5 million coins every day. This doesn’t make sense considering he earned over 30 million coins through one hunting session. The other example is when he chooses to hunt with the group in the secret realm and reveals his power to everyone around him - none of this screams “genius awakened player “ or “alpha,” just a man that succumbed to pity desires and couldn’t keep his power hidden. Realistically, John would be dead the moment seraphina knew of his power, because she would tell her father or use her connections to eliminate him as a potential threat. That’s just how the real world works.

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Nicx
NicxLv14

true

Yourfather01
Yourfather01Lv13

Well said, boss Exactly what made me quit😭

SANHARAKAH
SANHARAKAHLv2

Greetings. I am the greatest author of all time, and I have released a new chapter on my novel. Please feel free to bask in its glory.

SAINT_of_ORIGIN
SAINT_of_ORIGINLv14

thank you sir, for preventing me from wasting my time on this.

DaoistArbore
DaoistArboreLv14

“That’s just how the real world works” Great review from a person that is hopelessly cynical which in turn makes it worthless to anyone else that’s not overly cynical

MangaisLife1
MangaisLife1Lv2

Sounds like SIMP ! I mean that does make no sense and I guess I wont be wasting my time. I mean if he has made some connection between them and was part of harem and trustworthy I would get it but seems like he did it way early on, when he didnt even need to since he could earn way more and it could backfire since he didnt even know what she would do..an idiot for sure

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