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Robert_Siems
Robert_SiemsLv144mth
2024-09-09 06:41

it's alright, a nice slice of life novel. Sadly, it doesn't really give what I was hoping for. 100 chapters in and all the mc "invents" is a really good solar panel. It's about building a business empire. The technological system and inventing cool stuff play a minimal role. That's not necessarily a bad thing per se, but I was looking for sci fy stuff.

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SHADOW_AND_LIGHT
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hello, Can you review this book----------------------------------------------------------------THE PART OF NO RETURN : FIRST HUMAN EMPIRE------------------------------ Please

nbabraves
nbabravesLv12

Yeah, I wish there were more that actually utilized technologies and created a business in a balanced way. Ain’t too mad at it though, it is what it is. MC also doesn’t really have anything unique about him which is a little off putting. He gives some pseudo-china man vibes the way he gets jealous when it involves the girls he likes or allegedly doesn’t like such as catherine

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