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Horizon
HorizonLv136mth
2024-04-30 02:31

Read up to ch 78 and this will be a blunt review. This story is obviously inspired by the “Scholar’s Advanced Technological System.” However the difference in quality and understanding of why that story succeeds is not the same. A major issue in this tech type stories is that the author can easily be bogged down writing jargon or a lot of inessential details that do not move the story forward and just make you scroll through the chapter because as a reader you know it’s not important. This is a failure in any book in my opinion. Readers should not feel that they are reading filler and that their time is wasted reading. However, I felt that way so many times reading this story. There were chapters where more than half of it was wasted on a list of inconsequential information that would not even matter one chapter over. The reason SATS succeeded is because the author understood how to temper the info dumps, in that story they are reserved only for techno jargon where there is some competition or tension in the story, making you be invested in the jargon, even if all of it did not make sense to a normal person. Here is just wasted on the specs of a truck, properties, or employee listings. Now onto the story aspects. The system and its inception is super cookie cutter, some generic Goddess™️ finds pity on this generic dude is “struggling oh so much” with the most generic issues. Honestly, the background of the main character would not be that important if it wasn’t so bland. Now the story progress is suffering from the same issue of the info dumps, bogged down by inconsequential content. Oh he has to file for business permits, oh he has to spend four chapters buying a truck to stroke his bruised ego because some guy looked at him funny, oh he has to spend multiple chapters getting a drivers license. It’s all just so banal and honestly not interesting to read. Which is the worst thing a book can do, bore you. Which is funny considering the most interesting part of this novel are the two female side characters who are investors in his business. They are interesting. I feel like the story would be so much better if a lot of the “filler” is cut down and the author focuses on moving the story forward instead of meandering on the most mundane aspects of the story.

Building a Business Empire with my Technological System

Faux1231
4.2
400 Chs

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ThatOneGUy
ThatOneGUyLv13

Dude this guy might just suck at writing tbh, his isekai books worse than this and his zombie story is just mid.

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novelmeister
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I will give the bluntest review possible. If you like technology, business, and entrepreneurship/innovation - you may find reading this enjoyable. However, for those who don’t, I do not recommend this novel. The reason? The main character acquires a technology system from an ethereal being (a god) for a reason like “You interest me because you struggle a lot.” This reason is quite absurd to say the least and there are billions of others that are in his exact situation - nothing made him very special or standout. There was also very little character introduction prior to the question of the system. This system also theoretically gives him the knowledge and ability to create inventions decades ahead of when they’re supposed to be introduced. However, the main character claims these inventions are his and through his own volition, even going as far as getting mad when “his” solar panel invention is stolen. It’s quite infuriating because the MC is basically joyriding and overcomes his “struggles” in 5 chapters by proceeding to win 15 million pesos through gambling. An absurd story that you should only read if you’re a tech fanatic, and even then I wouldn’t recommend it.

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Pumpkin_King10
Pumpkin_King10Lv15

I admit I have a soft spot for any type of novel that has something to do with technology and this one is good it really shows how the main character is changing before your eyes from a normal student to a smart and independent man who is willing to earn his money his way without a system giving him all the support and it goes at a steady pace not to slow or to quickly making you really want to read more and not get lost not understanding what's being written 😉 thx author for the good novel and please continue 👍

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DarkFight3r
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Aliiireza
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The problem is that almost all technology stories are in a hurry to use advanced technology. Before this MC was average to the bottom of the class, you can improve your studies, but you cannot become an inventor within 1 month. He makes something that is 4.5 times better than the whole world, which is not compatible with reason. There is also a young rich girl who comes to invest in your card. Among all the technological novels that I have read so far, there was one that did not progress all at once, but slowly progressed, but I have not found another one like it. (Google Translate)

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rathan
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Pushover MC.............................

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DetachedDreamer
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I like the technological aspect but this MC sucks in every way possible. such poor business decisions and life decisions. there's nothing relatable or admirable about his character except for his care for his mother. definitely a let down.

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End_of_Today
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I read up to the 300+ chapter and can say it's one of best reads for me at least. I can easily recomend if you are interested in similar things.

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