Just a fair warning the author has a major NTR fetish. What was once an engaging second-chance, slice-of-life sports novel—focusing on the protagonist's growth both as a footballer and as a person, experiences he never had in his first life—has now devolved into a story driven by cheap drama. The second-chance theme feels redundant, the slice-of-life moments are bleak, and the sport itself has taken a backseat, now serving almost as filler. The girl he starts dating in chapter 39 NTR's him roughly 300 chapters later. We find out the MC is pure rubbish in bed and that the girlfriend even joins the roommate with two prostitutes/random girls... And whats our MC doing during all this? Probably spending his evenings staring at a blank wall for all we know. Even after everything transpires, the roommate and ex-girlfriend face zero repercussions for their actions and are actually rewarded for being terrible people. 1) Does he or she get an STD considering he's been sleeping with multiple girls every night? - No. 2) Does she get outed for cheating on her Boyfriend? No. 3) Does the roommate end the relationship after he had finished cucking the MC? - No. 4) Are there any repercussions for sleeping together behind his back for months? - No In summary, they start dating and live happily ever after, whilst the MC is forced out of the club because the author has to rely on cheap drama to progress the plot whilst overshadowing the actual story.
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LIKEFetish?😂😂😂 I'm actually even surprised that you took the time to write that much just to trash the aspect of the story that quite literally flew over your head. Happily ever after like the story was already over😂 Aiit kid, you can move on now, you wouldn't understand even if I was bothered to explain😂😂😂
Okay, then please explain your point of view regarding this. Many people (including me) don't want to read ntr fantasies. As the author, elaborate and/or disprove what the person above said.
Okay, then. Firstly, my book is not a fantasy novel. It's more of a realism story because the only fantasy element in the story is the main character's rebirth. No systems, no cheats, and no drugs. Just plain hard work and learning to achieve his goals. What he said about the story devolving into something driven by cheap drama is based on his perspective, he might have been expecting some type of story where the main character sweeps everything away as soon as he gets on the field, but if you look at it from a realistic point of view, there's no way that is possible. Even Messi and Ronaldo couldn't do that in their careers and they had more talent than my MC does. Secondly, the story is a realistic story, so it's based off of real life events. Realistic events. That he finds it to be cheap drama is a problem on his side as no one else is complaining even though they're following the story all the way till the latest chapters.
Now regarding the NTR thing, let me first state that Jason and Sofia were never dating. Seeing her tugged in Jason's heart strings in the 39th chapter and they went on a few dates, but things never got serious and he knows that. Somewhere along the line, mistakes were made and she got too drunk one night where she was a little angry with Jason and was in Mylo's place and things happened... Which like I said is a completely realistic occurrence that happens in real life more times than I care to count. I literally left signs that Sofia wanted to tell Jason sometimes after because she was feeling guilty, and I even later showed that she had an alcohol problem, which is also very realistic. When things finally get exposed, it's something everyone can literally see coming. If he didn't see it, then, I can only doubt whether he was reading the book seriously or not. Finally, regarding things like punishment to Mylo or Sofia, I want to first say that it's barely been just over fifty chapters or so since the exposure of their relationship so I do have something in he works for them, but even if I didn't, then so what? Realistically speaking, many things happen in life that never get punished and sometimes even the good guy is the one who gets the end of the stick. It literally happens all the time, but this guy somehow wants divine punishment on two other people who are leaving their life and by mistake brush against the MC's interests. I get that NTR is not something people want to see, even I don't like it, but I have to stay true to myself when writing otherwise I'll only write to cater to some readers wants which is not good for any writer. Writing should be done the way you want and the people interested would read, but if you only write to cater to one set of people, then only those people would ever find your book endearing. Sorry but I'm not that type of writer. I hope that answers your questions pal, there are a few spoilers in there, but you should be okay.
Appreciate the info, I'll give it a try then.
You don't talk as if it were inevitable, it's fiction, don't be such an idiot. Well, what can you expect from someone who made his protagonist be deceived...