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2024-01-12 16:25

typical giga chad that have more balls than brains. the type where he thinks he is baddass if he trains with weights for 40 years and doesn't speak with anyone. Good idea but poorly executed and...... still too easy and if this was this easy some gods or devils or etc... would grab humans make them train and prolong their life with immortal herbs, fruits, water etc... and brianwash them to fight for them or experiment on them. AND even more the entire idea that yahwe humans existed(ok maybe) but that they were so strong is riddicoulus many gods primodial beings devils would be tens of 1000x years older and they would thrash any trash human that trained 200 years. It doesn't add up. I would build the premis of this fanfic on the premise of underdog a weak human from the weakest race that only has steel like will unbreakable and is aware of his weakness. I would place him in ancient times and make him fight and learn and survive. He would be strong but not beacuse he was createad strong only beauce of his convictions!!!!

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Blast_NiroLv4

I had the same thought as you. The whole ancient human thing just doesn't work as it has many inconsistencies and a lot of plot holes down the timeline. Ps: I suggested an idea for how humans could grow in strength while also following the conan of DxD to some extent in the comment section in the first chapters check it out tell me what you think.

Sky_Demon_OrderLv14

ok thanks iIwill check it out

Blast_Niro:I had the same thought as you. The whole ancient human thing just doesn't work as it has many inconsistencies and a lot of plot holes down the timeline. Ps: I suggested an idea for how humans could grow in strength while also following the conan of DxD to some extent in the comment section in the first chapters check it out tell me what you think.
Sky_Demon_OrderLv14

which chapter?

Blast_Niro:I had the same thought as you. The whole ancient human thing just doesn't work as it has many inconsistencies and a lot of plot holes down the timeline. Ps: I suggested an idea for how humans could grow in strength while also following the conan of DxD to some extent in the comment section in the first chapters check it out tell me what you think.
Blast_NiroLv4

Chapter 3, I made 2 replies it's the second one.

Sky_Demon_Order:which chapter?
6BigBoneMeat9Lv14

Bro would of be fine if he slapped a sacred gear on top of it like incursio

Blast_Niro:I had the same thought as you. The whole ancient human thing just doesn't work as it has many inconsistencies and a lot of plot holes down the timeline. Ps: I suggested an idea for how humans could grow in strength while also following the conan of DxD to some extent in the comment section in the first chapters check it out tell me what you think.
6BigBoneMeat9Lv14

Or maybe he’s run on dbz human potential

Blast_Niro:I had the same thought as you. The whole ancient human thing just doesn't work as it has many inconsistencies and a lot of plot holes down the timeline. Ps: I suggested an idea for how humans could grow in strength while also following the conan of DxD to some extent in the comment section in the first chapters check it out tell me what you think.
xPonGxLv14

It’s just a fanfic so who cares if you want realism then go read a real book…sheesh!!

mad101Lv15

it a story if it good we'll say it if it bad we'll say it. The idea of this story is good but poorly implemented.ps it's just my opinion don't take it too seriously

xPonGx:It’s just a fanfic so who cares if you want realism then go read a real book…sheesh!!
IzioeLv14

Even fanfics have standards bro.

xPonGx:It’s just a fanfic so who cares if you want realism then go read a real book…sheesh!!
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