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Vangola_PrimeLv11yr
2024-01-07 17:20

It starts very well, honestly, although the beginning is forced and an event happens for him to go to the league of shadows just because of the reason that the author wants to get the waifus there, the plot starts well for a fanfic... But everything it goes downhill when there is descendant drama, and these multiverse OP entities meddling in the MC's life. Why can't we just have a direct reincarnation? Why does he need to reconcile with his system? Why does it have to be so complicated? Now, in the recent chapter, he was an existence similar to an Edritch god, he was unique, now thanks to his SIMP for his death, he 'forcibly' signed a kind of contract for his soul to be handed over to her if he died thus completely losing its unique status. Yes, this had a lot of potential, but it was completely destroyed by the pointless drama, and these multiverse beings that keep sprouting out of nowhere. It's only the 20th chapter, it's at the power level of a city destroyer, but these beings keep appearing like flies, meh.

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Victor_WeismannLv4

I think you're being unfair about the fact that the author chose these events just for the League of Shadows girls, but about the unnecessary drama, and these multiverse entities meddling in the MC's life, I completely agree with you.

OkayVelvetLv3

Bro wrote an entire essay because he can't handle somebody else doing things differently then what he wants. All I got from reading this review was "Wah waah Waaah" honestly that's what it sounded like to me

hero4hireLv11

are you author smurf coz you seem to take pesonal responsiblity of defending this novel

OkayVelvet:Bro wrote an entire essay because he can't handle somebody else doing things differently then what he wants. All I got from reading this review was "Wah waah Waaah" honestly that's what it sounded like to me
OkayVelvetLv3

I support this guy and he's had lots of hater's even before I said that. It's annoying and he's even stated it that he's tired of people dictating how he should write his story. Instead of writing a useless response actually realize people doing "criticism' like that only makes people want to give up writing. Because y'all annoying af tbh

hero4hire:are you author smurf coz you seem to take pesonal responsiblity of defending this novel
Zed1_Eren_Lv4

Hey there are alot of readers who read the reviews before going for the fanfiction so as not to waste time reading some trash and reviews like this helps a lot . so yeah don't go simping author by complaining reviewers

OkayVelvet:Bro wrote an entire essay because he can't handle somebody else doing things differently then what he wants. All I got from reading this review was "Wah waah Waaah" honestly that's what it sounded like to me
OkayVelvetLv3

Wasting time making a long and dumb review lol ok you would know a lot about reading trash that I believe!! Your entire profile is full of Simping so you can't talk 🤣🤣🖕

Zed1_Eren_:Hey there are alot of readers who read the reviews before going for the fanfiction so as not to waste time reading some trash and reviews like this helps a lot . so yeah don't go simping author by complaining reviewers
OkayVelvetLv3

You aren't even speaking English anymore bro stop sending me your essays it's just you whining and stretching the truth 😜

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toshiseroLv4

a#s licker

OkayVelvet:Wasting time making a long and dumb review lol ok you would know a lot about reading trash that I believe!! Your entire profile is full of Simping so you can't talk 🤣🤣🖕
OkayVelvetLv3

Thanks ❤️

toshisero:a#s licker
orangegummyLv13

mc are weak and can ezly control by other weakwill and stupid he use alex mercer ability like a newby homelessman . 🤡

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