None of this makes sense, I don't understand the MC's behavior, nor his actions, none of it makes sense, it's just poorly crafted wish fulfillment.Read it for yourself.
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LIKEnah this guy was yapping🙃everything makes sense and your also not leaving any plot holes.....1)Him making sure to break the window in the car to show that's how he "escaped"...2) Chesire blowing up the Building so that no one would ask what happened to the bodies of the people inside.
EzioAuditore_1:I apologize for the lacking of story quality, but I myself admitted that I am not a good author. I just write what comes to mind and I apologize if my writing isn’t to your specifications I hope you have a nice day.
It is simply my point of view, I did not read all the chapters, because they are not even enjoyable, if you like reading this type of things, it is very much your taste. I recommend you read again friend, or simply read other people's fanfic and compare.
LevelHeaded_Guy:nah this guy was yapping🙃everything makes sense and your also not leaving any plot holes.....1)Him making sure to break the window in the car to show that's how he "escaped"...2) Chesire blowing up the Building so that no one would ask what happened to the bodies of the people inside.
Плохое начало нормально, просто учиться на ошибках и с каждой главой будет развиваться ваши навыки
EzioAuditore_1:I apologize for the lacking of story quality, but I myself admitted that I am not a good author. I just write what comes to mind and I apologize if my writing isn’t to your specifications I hope you have a nice day.
Where do you see that I am criticizing and saying that I don’t like the start or the beginning, I was just trying to encourage the author for his self-critical answer.
OkayVelvet:Bad Start? Dang people like you got some crazy expectations on a fanfiction story of all things... Go write a story and show everyone how it's done then