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LastGodLv411mth
2024-01-20 19:01

This was a really good idea. And it was pretty good up until you had him go be a part of the brotherhood of assassins. You spent way too long in that place. You had him there for multiple multiple multiple multiple multiple chapters. That should have just been a stop gap until he got powerful enough to escape. But you had an languish there. Then you had the stupid thought to send him to another fking universe. Why would you do that when you haven't even explored the one you're fking currently in? We have seen there are 2 places in the one universe that he was reborn into. Gotham city and the brotherhood of assassins. There's really 2 places we've seen. He hasn't gone to metropolis. He hasn't gone anywhere else in that f****** universe. And he hasn't done anything but stupid missions for the brotherhood. What happened to him getting place of his own? What happened him setting up his own operation? Nothing is going as it should in the book.

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Good idea, poor execution. Pros: - The Gacha started nice, with competent but not overly powerful gains, giving him the power to survive mundane threats. - Attention to little details like how having taskmaster's aptitude and mimicry would change his balance and gait, revealing him as unordinary. Cons: - Started in Gotham again. It's a city that's suffering from a warlock's curse, not transmigration and reincarnation central. - The story lacks proper emotional expression, from both the MC and the other characters. It's only got sentences that states what they are feeling bluntly and adjectives set a tone that is never properly explored. - Plot points lack proper foreshadowing and build up. Like the league of shadows suddenly attacking the MC. It would be fine if there was a paragraph of events leading up to that point afterwards or may snippets, but no, the author just put in a note saying that the league was watching batman for a while. - Too many powerful entities are interacting with the MC, creating a dissonance with the setting. - The MC's personality is bland. He's got traits like being calm but that's it. No proper motivation beyond surviving to be found. But this is early on in the story, so this can change. These are just a few points and critics. The author can improve upon these, making it null. If the author decides to give high intellect to the MC, be aware of mundane plots and situations that this intelligence can help prevent, because judging from the current material, I highly doubt the author can write a proper genius MC.

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