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PeaceBeforeImpactLv151yr
2023-12-02 19:58

I wanted to like this story. unfortunately the author decided to power up his character way too fast. I don't mind intellect advancing quickly, but his physique jumped from chapter 9 to 13 Stupid Fast. I was enjoying his slow steady regaining of his human form so to speak. however he went from normal to strong to Superman in three chapters. I was looking forward to the character making some meaningful personal life changes and becoming self-sufficient. instead however we have a junior Superman spell character who's being supported by the X-Men by chapter 13. it's sours the story and that wrecks it for me. author I wanted to love you work but this is just not doing it for me. I could have stomached plot convenience, expanded senses or mental constructs to help him get through combat. however just going big dumb and broke with the Superman style strength growth just does not work in a good story.

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PettiaMius_6689Author

cant nerf a character like that, sad to see a solider go. Though it's a shame you wont see those concepts come to life... Be free my brother.

PeaceBeforeImpactLv15

Respect!

PettiaMius_6689:cant nerf a character like that, sad to see a solider go. Though it's a shame you wont see those concepts come to life... Be free my brother.
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