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2023-12-14 09:52

Writing quality- the quality was above average for a fanfic. No major errors and is a quality read. Update stability- I wish it updates more but it's a fanfic authors so my expectations were low. The story development- I like the direction of the story but I hate how weak the mentality and lack of foresight. I know it's suppose the show his growth but there doesn't seem to be a reward for his progress other than gym badges. Every time he goes exploring he almost dies everytime. Some scenarios aso seem forced and the probability of it happening is so low. Character design so far is mid but he left room growth so he might grow on me. World background is solid with some sus parts.

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As usual, romance and proper characterization leads to a story floundering. The concept is great, the pokemon and their personalities are written well. The battle scenes are very good. However, there are some issues: 1)The author struggles with how to characterize the MC. At one moment he is a rational mature character, but then the next he is a moronic or blushing fool stumbling through life with no control. 2)Side characters feel like they have little to no personality, and this holds true slightly for the MC and unforgivably for the female lead. The female lead has the personality of wet cardboard and within a short amount of chapters the mc (due to his own idiocy m) is locked into being with her. The pokemon, funny enough, feel more human than the humans. But that being said the female lead makes this nearly unreadable to me. 3)Awful romance. I think this ruins the story in its entirety. He reveals one of his most precious secrets. Shares his cheat. Props her up increasingly close to his level, and worst of all lets himself be bound for life to an incredibly mid and boring woman via ignoring the obvious signs. There are countless more interesting, lively, and beautiful chapters in this world yet our mc is now stuck with a trash female lead. If the romance wasn’t so god awful and cringe I would probably rate this at least 1.5 points higher, possibly 2. Overall, if you can tolerate inconsistent MCs and trashy romance then the rest of the story makes this worth at least an attempt to read. 6.8/10, if romance was not such a disaster ~8.2/10.

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