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Rookni
RookniLv11yr
2023-11-17 15:02

I like this story very much, although with the current pace and the speed of development of mc op ability and pokemon, I don't see how the story can continue above 100 chapters without getting dull, his team grows to fast is my point. Maybe he will pull a xianxia trick and travel to an alternative dimension with average stronger pokemon to fight, but at that point, it will be harder to keep the story interesting, in my opinion.

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Basso2142
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The fast development of his team is by design but I agree I can slow it down a little bit, although it has been 100k words already and Firefly has still not evolved into Charizard. I don't want to spoil things but I have a "solution" that is not a xianxia trick to the situation, the only tip I can offer is that it's related to Leaf and will make journeying to other regions in the future something possible. I mean, every pokemon fic seems to revolve only around a single region, the journey starts with the first pokemon and ends with a cataclysmic showdown against a legendary or against one of the terrorist organizations. I want to eventually have Emmet go against everything Ash did (with some small exceptions), so the story has to allow him to have a way to travel through the world and beat each League while tackling the issues of the regions in a timely fashion. The fast growth is necessary, otherwise him facing Mewtwo and standing his ground will be even more ludicrous.

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CruelReality
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As usual, romance and proper characterization leads to a story floundering. The concept is great, the pokemon and their personalities are written well. The battle scenes are very good. However, there are some issues: 1)The author struggles with how to characterize the MC. At one moment he is a rational mature character, but then the next he is a moronic or blushing fool stumbling through life with no control. 2)Side characters feel like they have little to no personality, and this holds true slightly for the MC and unforgivably for the female lead. The female lead has the personality of wet cardboard and within a short amount of chapters the mc (due to his own idiocy m) is locked into being with her. The pokemon, funny enough, feel more human than the humans. But that being said the female lead makes this nearly unreadable to me. 3)Awful romance. I think this ruins the story in its entirety. He reveals one of his most precious secrets. Shares his cheat. Props her up increasingly close to his level, and worst of all lets himself be bound for life to an incredibly mid and boring woman via ignoring the obvious signs. There are countless more interesting, lively, and beautiful chapters in this world yet our mc is now stuck with a trash female lead. If the romance wasn’t so god awful and cringe I would probably rate this at least 1.5 points higher, possibly 2. Overall, if you can tolerate inconsistent MCs and trashy romance then the rest of the story makes this worth at least an attempt to read. 6.8/10, if romance was not such a disaster ~8.2/10.

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