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Biraemen
BiraemenLv41yr
2023-09-29 14:04

Overall I find it an interesting read. It was definitely very rocky at the start with descriptions, dialogue and the overall idea of a person’s game avatar becoming their body in the Star Wars universe not being very well implemented at the start. However, as chapters go by, I can already see a marked improvement in all areas of writing, and I think a good example of that was simply the improvement in description and flow of writing that we see in the nightmare sequence. Also, if you end up reading this, author, I wouldn’t take a lot of comments on mc’s morality to heart as the average Webnovel reader is used to reading wish fulfillment stories with amoral or completely immoral mc’s that usually lack greater depth, not to say that it isn’t somewhat a wish fulfillment story, but still is good you are making an an attempt to add depth to your characters. One thing I would personally recommend if you want to take the time is to just check over the wiki a little bit to better familiarize yourself with the Star Wars races, but that’s Something that’s really up to your own discretion. Anyway, have fun writing the story, I’ll try to keep up to date with it.

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ChikinBorger
ChikinBorgerLv4

Oh yeah, God forbid a Sith be amoral. That’d be crazy.

Biraemen
BiraemenLv4

Except the character isn’t an actual sith

ChikinBorger:Oh yeah, God forbid a Sith be amoral. That’d be crazy.
Biraemen
BiraemenLv4

Also, if you want an interesting read with an actual sith MC, I’d recommend path of ruin. It’s over on space battles

ChikinBorger:Oh yeah, God forbid a Sith be amoral. That’d be crazy.
William_Snovelle
William_SnovelleLv14

I haven't read this yet but, what they said

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