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PedagangSiput
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2023-11-04 07:48

I'm on chapter 80. This story contains a brain cell virus where the MC is very terrible with various plots here and there which are very forced. The copy paste in this novel makes it look like a Chinese story, even I saw some of the OCs were cliche arrogant young masters. Until this chapter 80, MC is still hiding his identity. I still don't understand why he was hiding, even though there weren't any threats like people chasing his life to kill him. And the crazy thing is that the Yakuza somehow worship him like a God, rubbish plot.

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MorningWood_Dao
MorningWood_DaoLv5

good thing I'm not the one who felt "stupid" reading the novel. reading the first 3 chapters already made me rethink my choice of life. idk why, something feels wrong with the novel

Over_Lord_9904
Over_Lord_9904Lv5

Read again

Yamette_Kutasai
Yamette_KutasaiLv4

Anyone worth their salt in life would feel uncomfortable reading this type of work.

MorningWood_Dao:good thing I'm not the one who felt "stupid" reading the novel. reading the first 3 chapters already made me rethink my choice of life. idk why, something feels wrong with the novel
Nyxio
NyxioLv11

Cuz it is Chinese book’s translation and webnovel is Chinese..only that can explain this

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Alysson_Luiz
Alysson_LuizLv1

If this is a translation, what is the real name of this work, I can't wait for the chapters

Nyxio:Cuz it is Chinese book’s translation and webnovel is Chinese..only that can explain this
20_Mystic
20_MysticLv4

about the yakuza point your right

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Yue_021
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Binged around 150 Chaps all night before stopping. It was very good at first but then the plot becomes repetitive and the pacing became too fast which robbed that good experience I felt in the early chaps.If I have if honest I truly enjoyed the so called 'filler' slife of life chapters you stopped making after a certain point, its gives depth to the character and could have been another plot point to avoid the repetitiveness of the business side. Like you could have explored Mira's life in college and how her relationship with the mc impacted her life there. The reactions of the classmates? How did the treatment of her change when he donated a sum of money to the school? Perhaps you can have some male student attempt to 'flirt' her and how she rejects it and then follwed by the mc showing him that she is his. There is a lot of aspects in his relationship with not only with Mira but also her parents, her sister, his sisters, and etc. There's a lot of plotpoint that could have been explored. These things had a lot of potential that would give depth to your characters. Making them more relatable and easy to sympathize with. But we barely get any of it and then at certain point completely stopped it.There also the problem where you repeatedly told a scene instead of showing it. Like they said "Show not Tell". You did it right with the buying of the marriage ring. You showed us, instead of just saying "He bought an elegant ring" and leave it at that.I believe it was a bad move when you stopped making the so called 'filler' slice-of-slife chaps after the marriage chapter. Those where the things that I enjoyed and helped avoid the reptitiveness of the business side. So much potential but was not explored.Hope this helps you improve author. I geniunely enjoyed reading this book.

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