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war_fox
war_foxLv37mth
2024-04-30 11:48

this is a hot mess. the author has no idea what what they’re doing and is guessing/making-up everything as they go. they have no understanding of what the characters are like personality wise not skill wise, yet says they are “correcting” canon. they dont even understand that MEDICS would NOT be what KNIGHTS call for medic aid. they call for HEALERS. The author also said they were going to be accurate to both Fate (the series) and history. yet they dont even know the basics of either. so no i dont recommend reading this.

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greenbaypitbull
greenbaypitbullAuthor

I'm sorry you feel that way. I haven't gotten a chance to rewrite the prologue, as I'm taking care of my wife, and I am too excited to write the next Arc of the story (the rewrite will happen after that) I hope you find a book that checks all your boxes, and I hope you might consider giving this novel another chance when the first 11 chapters or so have been rewritten. I would encourage you to read the chapters from 11 or 12 on (I can't remember the exact chapter where the prologue ends) and tell me what you think of those, as they deal with Holy Grail Wars and such. Thank you for the honest review! i hope in the future you check to see if the rewrite is better, but if you still feel the same way, i understand. I appreciate you taking the time to read my novel, and I understand that it may not be for everyone. Thank you!

DaoistOfeOTA
DaoistOfeOTALv4

He said it was au in most parts and was changing it to what he thought would work get some reading comprehension my guy

greenbaypitbull
greenbaypitbullAuthor

hello! I just want you to know, that I'll be releasing the rewrite chapters of the Prologue this coming Sunday (09/29/2024) I would really appreciate it if you would give them a read, and tell me what you think. I believe I've been able to change alot of stuff while keeping the core values that make my story mine, while also being a little more true to the original lore and canon. if you don't feel like reading them, I understand as well, but I hope you will give them a chance!

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greenbaypitbull
greenbaypitbullAuthor

hello everyone! it's been a blast writing this novel, and I'm so thankful to everyone who reads it! a couple of things before you get into it.I am a brand new author who has never written anything, so please be patient with me! Another really big thing is that some aspects of my story differ from cannon. an example of this is that the knight's of the round table are weaker in the first part of the story (meaning the prologue set in ancient Britain.) so please don't be shocked if the characters seem weaker then they should be.the reason for this, is I didn't fully understand just how strong they were in life while I was writing it, so by the time I learned about it, I was already well into the story! another aspect of cannon that I've changed is that I'm combining most of the timelines into one. meaning that MC (Who is a Heroic Spirit) will participate in many of the Holy Grail Wars. (Ubw, Apocrypha, Grand Order, ect, ect) The third aspect I've changed is that I've made Alaya a little more "powerful" than her cannon counterpart. I understand that this might upset some readers, but I promise that it has a purpose. there are other things as well, but I hope that you give this novel a chance! I try and answer all the questions I can, so please feel free to ask questions or voice your concerns in the comments. I will try my best to answer them!again, I hope you give this novel a chance, but please remember that this book might not be for everyone, and that ok!I appreciate each and every single one of you!

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