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2024-03-24 14:14

10/10 The best author I've ever come across. ;) Some things are admittedly a bit forced at times but it doesn't matter as the progression more than makes up for it.

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Greenbaypitbull
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thank you so much for the review! what things do you feel are a bit forced? I'd like to know, so that way I can work on them in the future to improve my writing!

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Mainly just the power scaling seems a bit off as it feels like he was really strong when fighting goons but as seen with his fight with Aang he seemed really weak compared to how he was depicted. making it seem almost forced at times.[img=recommend]

Greenbaypitbull:thank you so much for the review! what things do you feel are a bit forced? I'd like to know, so that way I can work on them in the future to improve my writing!
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hello everyone! it's been a blast writing this novel, and I'm so thankful to everyone who reads it! a couple of things before you get into it.I am a brand new author who has never written anything, so please be patient with me! Another really big thing is that some aspects of my story differ from cannon. an example of this is that the knight's of the round table are weaker in the first part of the story (meaning the prologue set in ancient Britain.) so please don't be shocked if the characters seem weaker then they should be.the reason for this, is I didn't fully understand just how strong they were in life while I was writing it, so by the time I learned about it, I was already well into the story! another aspect of cannon that I've changed is that I'm combining most of the timelines into one. meaning that MC (Who is a Heroic Spirit) will participate in many of the Holy Grail Wars. (Ubw, Apocrypha, Grand Order, ect, ect) The third aspect I've changed is that I've made Alaya a little more "powerful" than her cannon counterpart. I understand that this might upset some readers, but I promise that it has a purpose. there are other things as well, but I hope that you give this novel a chance! I try and answer all the questions I can, so please feel free to ask questions or voice your concerns in the comments. I will try my best to answer them!again, I hope you give this novel a chance, but please remember that this book might not be for everyone, and that ok!I appreciate each and every single one of you!

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