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AnotherAtlas
AnotherAtlasLv21yr
2023-06-26 05:52

Honestly, the story started off well, but went downhill once the mc entered the academy. Here are a few problems. 1 Some rules of the setting change slightly to resemble those found in cultivation novels, such as the rules with the clans in the village. I'm thinking about something specific here in my mind, but it perfectly encapsulates the problem with low quality chinese naruto fanfics, where random xianxia logic and terms are inserted into otherwise unrelated worlds. 2 The potential harem, as well as forced simping. What I mean by that, is that the author is constantly making other characters and even the narration itself praise the main character. And his slight romance/harem seeking doesn't fit in with what his apparent goal is. Unless the (reminding you, chinese) author is actually competent and this is an elaborate scheme to get the hyuga bloodline, this is written purely to get all the coomers happy, the author being one of those very same coomers.

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1.I try to replace or remove the random xianxia logic, however in some scenarios I’m forced to leave it in because if it were to be removed I would also need to remove the next 1-2 paragraphs as it wouldn’t make sense. 2. The simping part I can’t really remove as it would conflict with the plot.

AnotherAtlas
AnotherAtlasLv2

Yeah, it's just coomer appeasement. Current lineup looks like ino, hinata and karin.

AnotherAtlas
AnotherAtlasLv2

Well, as the translator, you're not at fault. The review is like 99% about the og author.

5834:1.I try to replace or remove the random xianxia logic, however in some scenarios I’m forced to leave it in because if it were to be removed I would also need to remove the next 1-2 paragraphs as it wouldn’t make sense. 2. The simping part I can’t really remove as it would conflict with the plot.
Z1op
Z1opLv12

Plot? Hahhhahahhahhahaha. Its a Chinese fanfiction. Half of the plot is the main character saying are you courting death.

5834:1.I try to replace or remove the random xianxia logic, however in some scenarios I’m forced to leave it in because if it were to be removed I would also need to remove the next 1-2 paragraphs as it wouldn’t make sense. 2. The simping part I can’t really remove as it would conflict with the plot.
KazutoT_ArtemisF
KazutoT_ArtemisFLv12

Its one of the reasons why I hate and like Chinese Stories, it's so cliche and annoying that it sometimes makes me laugh. Although it does get annoying when the same thing happens in almost all Chinese Novels.

Z1op:Plot? Hahhhahahhahhahaha. Its a Chinese fanfiction. Half of the plot is the main character saying are you courting death.
machadogbc
machadogbcLv15

Is there romance?

5834:1.I try to replace or remove the random xianxia logic, however in some scenarios I’m forced to leave it in because if it were to be removed I would also need to remove the next 1-2 paragraphs as it wouldn’t make sense. 2. The simping part I can’t really remove as it would conflict with the plot.
TheNight_Wyvern
TheNight_WyvernLv2

understandable have a great day

Eno_Banahene
Eno_BanaheneLv4

Z1op:Plot? Hahhhahahhahhahaha. Its a Chinese fanfiction. Half of the plot is the main character saying are you courting death.
Deadrule_vivek
Deadrule_vivekLv5

what do you expect in a Chinese fanfiction ...

Deadrule_vivek
Deadrule_vivekLv5

Also, you claim to not like h#rem and romance ...so you should have read the tags before?it seems like a waste of time or masochism to read something you hate seeing your review

AnotherAtlas
AnotherAtlasLv2

I swear to god, you harem defender brainlets always pop up in these situations and I always have to explain. When I started reading, this had no harem tag on it. Author only added it after I made my review, to make sure he doesn't attract the wrong readers again. Normally, I would skip past novels with harems, but if you have a harem without the tag, I pretty much always leave a pretty bad review, cuz they wasted my time.

Deadrule_vivek:Also, you claim to not like h#rem and romance ...so you should have read the tags before?it seems like a waste of time or masochism to read something you hate seeing your review
Jhon_Ariel_Castro
Jhon_Ariel_CastroLv4

is this about the.... ? 😆

Deadrule_vivek
Deadrule_vivekLv5

Still makes you dumb

AnotherAtlas:I swear to god, you harem defender brainlets always pop up in these situations and I always have to explain. When I started reading, this had no harem tag on it. Author only added it after I made my review, to make sure he doesn't attract the wrong readers again. Normally, I would skip past novels with harems, but if you have a harem without the tag, I pretty much always leave a pretty bad review, cuz they wasted my time.
Deadrule_vivek
Deadrule_vivekLv5

Also that's just BS

AnotherAtlas:I swear to god, you harem defender brainlets always pop up in these situations and I always have to explain. When I started reading, this had no harem tag on it. Author only added it after I made my review, to make sure he doesn't attract the wrong readers again. Normally, I would skip past novels with harems, but if you have a harem without the tag, I pretty much always leave a pretty bad review, cuz they wasted my time.
AnotherAtlas
AnotherAtlasLv2

Nah, bro's ego got bruised and he can't admit fault. Go back to jerking off to letters. That's the only thing you're good for.

Deadrule_vivek:Also that's just BS
Deadrule_vivek
Deadrule_vivekLv5

jerking off to letters ? oh , I get it ...you're one of those well no point in arguing with you then

AnotherAtlas:Nah, bro's ego got bruised and he can't admit fault. Go back to jerking off to letters. That's the only thing you're good for.
Chaos_Azatoth
Chaos_AzatothLv4

And you think you're smart?...What a fool.

Deadrule_vivek:Still makes you dumb
Fuehrer
FuehrerLv3

Just leave them alone man, you just made the Harem Readers look bad and brain dead

Deadrule_vivek:jerking off to letters ? oh , I get it ...you're one of those well no point in arguing with you then
Deadrule_vivek
Deadrule_vivekLv5

it seems to me that you're the ret@rd here, read my comment again ...the argument already ended when I replied "no point in arguing with you then to op"tf are you barging in it for ? trying to be a smart@ss?

Fuehrer:Just leave them alone man, you just made the Harem Readers look bad and brain dead
Fuehrer
FuehrerLv3

What a rude person, I'm just spitting facts and u just call me Ret@rd?? Heh, as expected from your people

Deadrule_vivek:it seems to me that you're the ret@rd here, read my comment again ...the argument already ended when I replied "no point in arguing with you then to op"tf are you barging in it for ? trying to be a smart@ss?
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