Item: I Became The Mafia Boss Inside The Novel
Rating: 5
Author: Artiankillerfish

ArtiankillerfishLv41yr

2023-06-14 02:26

in All honesty, there isn't much chapters for me to write a review about it but it does seem promising. the writing is good, great good job author but on a serious note I was waiting for u to post on your first work until I realized you're going on a haitus. i really wish it goes well for you because tbh I did enhjoythe novel and it's a great experience to see others mind come to life on paper (screen) in a life and characters of its own.critic is something very common yet destructive to a creators mind, yet it can always build them up and push them higher. i hope it'll brethe latter for you. because despite everything, it's hard to satisfy a human and impossible to satisfy everyone. ik i sometimes nag about stuff that I don't like and I'm sorry. but genuinely just write for yourself. public validation is nice but depending on it is self destructive. enjoy your own craft, and practice and experience is what makes perfect... at least something near it?just seek satisfaction from yourself and past selves. you've came so far. and yk? the moon isn't even a perfect circle nor is the sun but it's their imperfections as a creature that makes their beauty (okay they're just hanging rock in the sky that goes disco but u get me) ahem, I'm not saying not to improve yourself. it just that I can't help but feel it was a heavy blow to you. I'm sorry if my previous review mightv've done u more harm than good. keep up your work and enjoy it man

I Became The Mafia Boss Inside The Novel

Deathilim_609

4.5

138 Chs

Liked by 9 people

Replies18

Deathilim_609Author

I genuinely appreciate this, thank you. I put my first book in hiatus because it was going no where and there were a lot of problems in the beginning. I couldn't help but blame myself for it and try to rewrite and fix it when I have a chance.Genuinely, thank you for this. I'll take your advice to heart as I also came into a similar revelation myself. Now I'll use my former experience and mistakes to make this novel better.I appreciate you fam, don't worry, a writer that can't handle criticism doesn't' deserve to be one. All the love.

1yr

ArtiankillerfishLv4

It's a long tiring process ik, and meeting a bottle neck with something that might've taken so much efforts, yeaersand energy is heartbreaking. i wish you the best in your journyeyas an author. and for you to shape the world you've always dreamed of and bring it to paper or screen or ahem.. ykyk. the point is to prioritize yoursselfand fun. because despite the ways it's received. art and writing is similar. even if writing is more into giving something for an audience rather than sharing ur Craft. it's just the way you precive it. it's your work and your craft have lots of fun and go crazy. anyways most people rate and criticize because of taste and preference rather than the actual objective quality. improvement takes time and paitence towards yourself. and not giving an F* about some other

Deathilim_609:I genuinely appreciate this, thank you. I put my first book in hiatus because it was going no where and there were a lot of problems in the beginning. I couldn't help but blame myself for it and try to rewrite and fix it when I have a chance.Genuinely, thank you for this. I'll take your advice to heart as I also came into a similar revelation myself. Now I'll use my former experience and mistakes to make this novel better.I appreciate you fam, don't worry, a writer that can't handle criticism doesn't' deserve to be one. All the love.

1yr

FaierLv14

Will it be harem (more than one wife)? Personally I hope not

1yr

Deathilim_609Author

It's undecided as of yet.

Faier:Will it be harem (more than one wife)? Personally I hope not

1yr

RionnLv15

No NTR, right?

Deathilim_609:It's undecided as of yet.

1yr

Deathilim_609Author

Why even question that? 😂

Rionn:No NTR, right?

1yr

RionnLv15

Just to be safe

Deathilim_609:Why even question that? 😂

1yr

Sonu_SirajLv14

is this single fl or harem

1yr

zurnLv3

Do you have a definitive answer yet? For me I gotta know because Harem is an absolute deal breaker for me cause I hate it. If you still don’t though that’s completely fine aswell

Deathilim_609:It's undecided as of yet.

1yr

Twilight_of_godLv13

need more chapters 😭

1yr

its_LLv3

have you decided yet?

Deathilim_609:It's undecided as of yet.

1yr

Ashborn1609Lv4

have you decided if its single or harem ?

Deathilim_609:It's undecided as of yet.

1yr

Ashborn1609Lv4

single fl*

Ashborn1609:have you decided if its single or harem ?

1yr

Deathilim_609Author

I forgot this thread. Yes, It's single fml. But some of the heroines will develop a crush on the MC, but nothing more. I'm still in the middle of figuring out who's the female lead.

Ashborn1609:have you decided if its single or harem ?

1yr

Ashborn1609Lv4

I can finally continue it then. thanks for the reply

Deathilim_609:I forgot this thread. Yes, It's single fml. But some of the heroines will develop a crush on the MC, but nothing more. I'm still in the middle of figuring out who's the female lead.

1yr

yellow_puffLv4

...you should put romance in the tags, i was so happy thinking it has no romance ahhh now i learned there is

Deathilim_609:I forgot this thread. Yes, It's single fml. But some of the heroines will develop a crush on the MC, but nothing more. I'm still in the middle of figuring out who's the female lead.

1yr

Deathilim_609Author

Noted. The romance isn't very prominent in this series, but I understand what you mean.

yellow_puff:...you should put romance in the tags, i was so happy thinking it has no romance ahhh now i learned there is

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Daoist1QR2qILv2

I hope fml will someone matching with our evil boy

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